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The Pain Of Strain ( Falls Mainly On your Back )
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The Pain Of Strain ( Falls Mainly On your Back ) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Staccatto pulse of tortured flesh beats down defense's walls . Un-mindful of the consequence , a fool's forgotten all , he's ever learned of weakest links and what becomes of those , who do not think , and rush right in where forces are opposed . A constant stream of agony awaits these hapless few , convinced they can move mountains , just the way they used to do . Ignoring hist'ry's lessons and the very simple fact , that age and its progression takes its toll out on your back ! And there-in lies a truth the fates would not have us forget , that merely getting older does not make us smart . You bet ! And leve'rage is a tool that fools had best use otherwise , the pain of strain reminds them that they are just mortal guys ! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Good play on words. Good rhythm and an all round good poem. Joyce |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Clever!! I like this one a whole lot. Bravo! subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dr, Pleasant and amusing to read. Enjoyed |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
I gather we are feelin our age.  good poem doc. |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Really a great JOB.... ~Wasi~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Joyce , Thank you , Ouch ! , it hurts when I type ! Fading Away , Thanks , although I'm not too sure how appropriate your screen name is ( 1000 posts in just over a month ? ). I am honored to be #1 M . Sy , Being laid up for the better part of three days , and still re-cuperating verrrry slowly I had lots of time to work on this . Glad you enjoyed . Suzanne , I'm not sure I would call what I'm feeling age .I've got a lot of other words to describe it though ( most of them are un-printable and directed at the idiot who brought me to my present state !) Thanks Wasi , Yeah , I can talk words of wisdom pretty good , but if I only knew how to practice them there would be no need to write them down . Thanks . Doc |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Hmm... so this means I'm mortal too uh? I already wondered where that creaking sound came from... dang! I thought I was going to live forever! Great poem Doc! |
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Justin Flux New Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 9Global |
Munda , Thanks , yep 'fraid so . Things are so much easier in the " stute ". There , when we want to move mountains , we just write them out of the way . Oh well , if this doesn't get better pretty soon I'm gonna have to re-stock my little black bag . It's almost as empty as my head . Doc |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't know whether to compliment you on your great poem, sympathize with you for your aching back... or scold you for the title that will have me humming My Fair Lady tunes all day! LOL Enjoyed the read... get better soon! *S* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is delightful, Dr.Moose! I love it! I hope your back is better real soon! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ouch!!!!!!!! almost got a hernia just reading it... hehe i LOVED this!! lots of truth here.... this one LIFTED me with your perfect meter, rhyme, cadence and all that sweet syrupy stuff... *wink*.... but lemme tell ya... there's some really great gyms at this one place i used to go to.... (did we go to different 'stutes together?... hehe *grin) excellent writing, my friend |
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