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Auguste
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0 posted 2001-04-19 06:34 PM


Let Me Be

Let me be the steam of breath
between two lovers in the fall,
the shadow of an ancient oak,
if but for an hour,
a single cricket,
singing in the night.

Let me be the laughter of a child,
the breeze that falling day stirs,
or the liquid crimson left behind
upon the sky.

Let me be a drop of dew
in morning's early light,
clinging to a wildflower
and mirroring                    
the surrounding landscape,
a ripple
left behind by swimming Mallard,
the smile on a mothers lips
when the child she's just delivered
is placed against her breast.

Let me be the stroke
of an artists brush,
the sensual curves of woman,
a blossoming rose,
welcoming and nourishing
a hummingbird.

Let me be a hug
that is given to an old person
alone and in need of hope,
the touch of fingertips
against silk,
a raindrop
replenishing withered grasses.

Let me be a firefly
that is chased by children
carrying jars,
the afterglow of passions spent,
a tidal pool
sustaining life until the sea returns,
a fallen leaf,
floating on a crisp autumn day.  

Let me be the joy,
or torn wrapping paper  
on a Christmas morn,
the faith felt during a prayer,
the fresh scent on air
after a thunderstorm.

Let me be jewels
tossed on an ocean,
reflecting in the sun,
worn, forgotten shoes
that knew so many steps,
tired eyelids
that settle into sleep,
the music
of an icy mountain stream.

Let me be a snowflake
that helps create a winter scene,
whispers
heard in lovemaking,
a tear of joy,
a moment of peace,
a poet
that feeds
the human heart
and calms
its restlessness,

or just let me be me.


Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

© Copyright 2001 Michael Auguste - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-04-19 06:44 PM


Let me be the steam of breath
between two lovers in the fall,
the shadow of an ancient oak,
if but for an hour,
=========================

Let me be the laughter of a child,
the breeze that falling day stirs,
or the liquid crimson left behind
upon the sky.
=========================

Let me be the stroke
of an artists brush,
the sensual curves of woman,
a blossoming rose,
welcoming and nourishing
a hummingbird.
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you've captured many lovely images and moment of sweet anticipation in this Michael
a wonfderful moment of inspire...
by the gift of a poets pen, we can be all these things in our verse and minds.
well done poet sir  

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.


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2 posted 2001-04-19 06:47 PM


You give, and keep, promises well.
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3 posted 2001-04-19 07:48 PM


a poet
that feeds
the human heart
and calms
its restlessness"


Indeed you do feed the human heart, and the poets that read your words....lovely Michael...


Lauren~


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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



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4 posted 2001-04-19 07:54 PM


Michael--You have written such possitive and uplifting thougts in this poem.  I hope you don't mind but you've inspired me.  I think that's a good thing...thanks, my friend.
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5 posted 2001-04-19 07:58 PM


I just love this one, thanks for sharing!
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-04-19 08:53 PM


Greeneyes,
This is excellent writing, I'm impressed.

Sami
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7 posted 2001-04-19 10:18 PM


wow..another amazing one..i wanted to cry after this one!! its so good! i can so see that all the things you list as you wanting to be are things of beauty and happiness and the last line 'let me be me' goes so well as you are obviously a very beautiful person   well done...
~Sami~

'Sometimes we think it's holding on that makes us strong, but sometimes it's letting go' ~~Sam Ewing

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8 posted 2001-04-19 10:21 PM


Or just let me be me........
You are the most wonderful you that can be Michael,  gentle and kind poet sir.  *s*
~D~

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

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9 posted 2001-04-19 10:34 PM


Michael~
You are touching a magic place within yourself~
Your writing reflects a well-spring of your soul ...

'Let me be jewels
tossed on an ocean,
reflecting in the sun,
worn, forgotten shoes
that knew so many steps'


Beautiful !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2001-04-19 10:57 PM


Excellent writing, Michael....
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11 posted 2001-04-19 11:23 PM


You thought I would like it and you were right!  This is probably the best thing I have read in a long, long time.  I loved it!

~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~

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12 posted 2001-04-20 05:18 PM


Janet Marie,
Your posts on my poems are always something I look forward to.  Thank you.  

Lauren,
Thank you for the sweet compliment, my friend.  I think all poets feed the heart in their own way.  

Martie,
Knowing that something I've written inspires someone else to write is always a thrill for me.  Thank you, my friend.  

Walker,
I'm glad you loved this one.  I had to stop before it became a book.  There are so many lovely things I could've put in this. Thank you.

Sy,
Greeneyes?  Well, my eyes are kinda green. :-)  Sorry, I know you meant Lauren.  Just messing with you.  Thanks for stopping by and reading.  

Sami,
What a sweet thing to say.  Thank you and thanks for reading.  

Gentle Spirit,
I love knowing that my gentle and kind nature somehow shows through in what I write. I appreciate you noticing and I thank you, sincerely, for your nice comments.  

Marge,
You say the sweetest things.  Thank you, my friend.  

Deer,
An "excellent" coming from you truly means a lot to me.  Thank you, sir.  

Mysteria,
Oh my...I haven't had my writing complimented like this in a good while. I can't tell you how good this makes me feel.  Thank you so much.  

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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13 posted 2001-04-24 11:02 PM


you are right..i did like this one...i read this twice, just content to absorb as fully as possible the beautiful images you conjured...

thanx for the read

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14 posted 2001-04-24 11:05 PM


Let me be your raincoat when dark clouds form overhead
Let me be the comforter you snuggle with in bed
Let me be the medicine to ease your misery
Should you believe you're all alone, let your thoughts be of me.

Let me be the tissue that you use to dry your tears
Let me be arms open wide to override your fears
Let me be a quiet thought you keep inside your brain
Should life sing you a song of sadness, make me your refrain.

Let me be the feel of evening breeze upon your cheek
When you describe emotions, let me be the words you speak
Let me be your summer day when winter comes with chill
If weakness causes you to falter, let me be your will.

Let me be the melody to chase away the blues
When you need easy listening, let me be the one you choose
Let me be the sunshine to make darkness fade from view
And, most of all, I pray that you will let me be...with you.

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15 posted 2001-04-25 02:34 PM


Deer,

An excellent piece of writing. I wish I'd included a few of your images in my own poem. (can I swipe them?)    

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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16 posted 2001-04-25 04:35 PM


I'd read Martie's poem that was inspired by this... so when I saw the title, I was nodding in agreement. *S* And you were so right... except that liking is far too mild a term! *G* This is wonderful!

And Bal... your poetic response is beautiful!

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17 posted 2001-04-25 08:00 PM


Incredible writting! I envy your talent.

"I am not alive enough to kill myself." - Mary Ipal

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18 posted 2001-04-25 08:54 PM


Wonderful.  So many good things you found to be.  Uplifting and dreamy.  Joyce
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19 posted 2001-04-25 10:36 PM


So exquisite was the imagery in this Michael, so beautiful and so very real.  As with all of what you write, you paint such a vivid picture that captures the heart.  Thank you........Sue

Suetang

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20 posted 2001-04-25 10:43 PM


Truly a gifted wordsmith you are.  I doubt I could add any more to the fine things already said.  Thankyou for the travel into places of the heart.

A.M.  

[This message has been edited by Amuse_mi (edited 04-25-2001).]

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21 posted 2001-04-26 05:43 PM


suthern,
Wasn't Martie's poem just great? :-)  She's such a good writer.  Thank you for liking this piece.

Secret Whisper,
I've honestly never considered myself a poet. I'm an artist. I paint on canvas.  I do thank you for enjoying this one.

Joyce,
Thanks for coming by and reading.  It pleases me much that you like this.

Sue,
You always say the nicest things, my friend. Thank you, dear.

Amuse_mi,
I sincerely appreciate the compliment.  Thank you

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Martie
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22 posted 2004-12-24 01:57 PM


Just bringing back one of my favorite Auguste poems while thinking of Michael.  
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23 posted 2004-12-25 12:15 PM


thank you Martie
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