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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-04-19 03:01 PM


I am torn.
Drawn as if to the sun
Knowing the closer I go
The worse the burn.
Fearing rejection.
Fearing acceptance.
Fearing.
Loving.
Respecting.
Anticipation
Quickens my pulse.
I take pen in hand
To write:
Can you accept love
Boldly giv’n from such as I
Who loves you so much
No,
Don’t ask,
Tell!
(Maybe she won’t like a senryu)
Would that I could speak
My love in words that touch you
As soft lips melding
Or
Would that I could speak my love
Words brought on wings of dove
Whispering in thine ear
While holding thee so near.
No,
I think I’ll just read
Her verse.



Live for love. Without love, you don't live.



[This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 04-19-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 The Tall Texan aka Doctor Love - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-04-19 03:09 PM


such
sweet sounds
one serenely seeks
sweet sounds,
such

as these

she shall
answer
soon

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2001-04-19 03:23 PM


What a tender heart--this was written in love and longing. Quite beautiful!
Waseem Cheema
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3 posted 2001-04-19 03:34 PM


I take pen in hand
To write:
Can you accept love

is really great. Often it happens...

I love to nice poetry.

Lady In White
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4 posted 2001-04-19 03:37 PM


...to be torn....
reborn....

through birth of new
renewed....

a most lovely weave...

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with you
5 posted 2001-04-19 03:46 PM


Every word of this is beautiful.....and made big sighs......gentle and so so sweet......   SEA

If I let you into my heart.....
will you promise to stay?
~Sue~

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6 posted 2001-04-19 04:02 PM


Beautiful.
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7 posted 2001-04-19 04:16 PM


I am torn.
Drawn as if to the sun
Knowing the closer I go
The worse the burn.
======================

ahhhh ... like the perverbial moth to the flame ...

never fear your own words ... silence is always worse than sincerity.
this is a very cool premise and inspire.
well done poet sir  

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.


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8 posted 2001-04-19 04:18 PM


Oh, to be the recipient of these words.  Joyce
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9 posted 2001-04-20 12:20 PM


Senyru or sonnet or sweet songs or soft whispers... if the words are sincere, they'll be beautiful to one who returns your feelings whatever the format. *S* Of course... reading's nice too... but you never know what response you might be missing by not writing/trying. *S* Great poem!
Corinne
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10 posted 2001-04-20 03:18 PM


Very intriguing and very well done!

Corinne

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11 posted 2001-04-20 05:07 PM


Nice.
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2001-04-20 05:25 PM


Wonderful expression of your feelings...James
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13 posted 2001-04-20 11:36 PM


Go for it!  Write it, if you have me sighing I can't image what it will do for her LOL  

~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~

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14 posted 2001-04-23 12:03 PM


Hummm?

Moonstruck

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