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What A Heart Cant See
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What A Heart Cant See |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~What A Heart Cant See~ Love no longer sees me ... here where in I stand, hearts that once felt promise ... now feel chained by this gold band. Eyes that fail to recognize ... the changes this hearts been thru ... she's not the same scared woman ... that he once knew. Two hearts becoming lost in the distance ... the space in between grows wide, in time so much has faded away ... falling into this great divide. How does this happen ... is neglect the only one to blame, this heart still remembers ... when they shared so much more than a name. So many questions go unanswered ... or maybe there's just nothing left to say, when silence is the only one speaking ... hearts can hear no reasons to stay. When did his eyes lose their vision ... her reflection is no where to be found, so her eyes then realize ..."the ties that bind" ... now only tie her down. At what cost ... what price ... is contentment finally held, do we have to dance with the devil ... to have all our demons expelled. When does following your heart ... become an act of sin, only a heart's conscience can know ... the answers all lie with in. Who knows this wisdom ... who possesses the secrets untold, is it destiny that decides which hearts will end with ..."to have and to hold." All this heart knows ... is love no longer sees me ... here where in I stand, and now I hear whispered promises calling out to me ... reaching for my hand. Janet Marie **reposted at the request of a friend. ~*~ ~*~ ~*~ ~*~ ~You Dont Even Know Who I Am~ By Patty Loveless from the cd: When Fallen Angels Fly She left the car in the driveway She left the key in the door She left the kids at her mama's And the laundry piled up on the floor She left her ring on the pillow Right where it wouldn't be missed She left a note in the kitchen Next to the grocery list It said, you don't even know who I am You left me a long time ago You don't even know who I am So what do you care if I go He left the ring on the pillow He left the clothes on the floor And he called her to say he was sorry But he couldn't remember what for So he said I've been doing some thinking I've been thinking that maybe you're right I go to work every morning And I come home to you every night And you don't even know who I am You left me a long time ago You don't even know who I am So what do I care if you go You don't even know who I am So what do I care if you go I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... Your broken heart ... your broken wings. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'At what cost ... what price ... is contentment finally held, do we have to dance with the devil ... to have all our demons expelled. When does following your heart ... become an act of sin, only a heart's conscience can know ... the answers all lie with in. Who knows this wisdom ... who possesses the secrets untold, is it destiny that decides which hearts will end with ..."to have and to hold." All this heart knows ... is love no longer sees me ... here where in I stand, and now I hear whispered promises calling out to me ... reaching for my hand.' Fantastically expressed, as usual, JM! You've penned some powerfully thought-provoking lines...I used to believe in destiny as the only deciding factor in who we will spend our lives with, but that has changed...I do believe in destiny to bring us The One...but it is up to us to make it work and figure out what we need to do to achieve that. You know I love this write, m'friend! sp  to be with you... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You all rise to the occasion...esp. when posting past favorites... however, I challenge you.... for a senryu.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So tell me poetess of the Sun... what is the challenge subject matter? A senryu about?????? (you know brevity is not my strong suit)   |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you snowpants...for the kind reply... a friend whose going thru a divorce asked me to repost this oldie... and as for fate and destiny... your right.. one does have to work at it... I think Im just too tired to care right now.. happy endings seem like fairy tales to me. thanks for always reading  I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
[please note, this is NOT a commentary on JM's beautiful poem] JM - picayune |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--The poem expresses the emptyness that sometimes happens in two people's lives together...and makes me want to cry and give you a hug at the same time. So I will...((((((hugs)))))) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, A wonderful write. I haven't been watching the posts so I missed this. This is the JM butterfly that so fascinates me. This is the tinkerbell that lights a glow when passing me This is the winkiewinkie for Randy and me. Love Sy |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, this one speaks volumes to me. You will tear yourself apart if you sit and wonder why though. You just have to try to pick up the pieces and move on. Never an easy task. Emotional write. All writing comes |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is a great piece of fantasy, JM, and fantasy it must be because it could NEVER happen to someone as wonderful, vivacious and giving as you...not to a spammy queen! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Here ya go Sun ... ya teach us a new word tonite pic·a·yune (pk-yn) adj. --------- Of little value or importance; paltry. See Synonyms at trivial. Petty; mean. n. ----------- Something of very little value; a trifle: not worth a picayune. ----------- 5-7-5 eyes lacking vision one who takes more than they give closed off heart and mind inconsequential out of sight and out of mind my worth in his life 3-5-3 trival no significance picayune |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Martie ... thank you sweetie... for the hug and just for being you my friend  Sy ... that fascination is a two way street thank you and Randy for the beautiful reply and the winkies..you boys spoil me and me loves ya for it!!LW ... youre so right ... and I know you been here and speak from experience.... I stopped asking why a long time ago... chalk it up to complacency I guess... or being just plain tired. We learn all our lessons the hard way, right? thank you for the kind words and encouragement. Deer ... your so cute when your talking spam ... ( what were ya saying about a fantasy about Spam???) Nevermind... Nan will have to bring her big eraser if ya answer that one LOLthank you for the sweet reply and ROFL@vivacious. thanks all and to my friend whose living this now.. better days are ahead, you did the hard part ... and Im proud very of ya and me loves ya I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
JM, Poignant, thought provoking. I am asking myself these very same questions lately. You put these words together very vividly. |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Janet Marie, I found this incredibly sad, even heart-wrenching. An excellent piece of poetry. If this is you, then you have my hug. ((((hug)))) If not, then you're stuck with one anyway. Take care.Michael Proust- |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"When did his eyes lose their vision ... her reflection is no where to be found, so her eyes then realize ..."the ties that bind" ... now only tie her down." Incredibly well expressed JM ... hearts that are heavy understand the emotions that you've captured in this powerful piece. Wonderful depth in this write gator-gal ... you've gripped this reader with the intensity of the heart-ache and sentiments expressed, beautifully sad ... beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ I would offer a hug to anyone who feels - 'silence is the only one speaking' Compassionate thoughts to your friend~ Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Well it may be an "oldie" Janet, but it is certainly a "goodie". A wonderfully written and heart wrenching piece, take care! "Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown [This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brava.....now post the senryu for the world to see.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is heartfelt Janet, and I think so many of us can relate to it. So glad that you reposted. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ this brought tears to my eyes...I hope this isn't real for you....this is my worst nightmare....so sad.....you write so real so honest it's raw.... SEA |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Janet Marie~ Sometimes it is the heart that can see, it's beautiful and sad....be well and hugs to you....Peace~ Lauren~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I think Im just too tired to care right now.. happy endings seem like fairy tales to me. I totally understand that statement...sorry I *peeked* at your warm responses to others.. ~Wynter/Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Where have I been? (AGAIN--IF YA KNOW, DON'T ANSWER THAT) What an incredibly poignant write, me girl! I leave ya with HUGS for this! e ya later girlie! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
you brought a tear to my eye - and perhaps provoked another poem - you are one extraordinary woman - you know that? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Gemini... many times we have mirrored each other... thank you for the kind reply and understanding. Im sorry you know thses feelings. So glad to see you here again. Michael ... thank you sweet poet sir...for the hug and the wonderful reply Kit ...your replies are what is beautiful... thank you my dear gator-girlie, like I always day...your a smile waiting to happen Margie ...thank you sweets... for the hugs and compassion...Im sending them right back at ya Eagle... hey you.. so good to see you back here...miss your sweet smile thank you poet sir for the kind words. Sun... thanks for that Brava ... but me thinks I will leave those sad senryus on this lil thread of misery..they go well together...but I thank ya for the challenge and for the inspire and for teaching me a new word for an old feeling GS .. thank you and so sorry you too relate... nice to see you back here with us. Sea ...didnt mean to make ya cry sweets... thank you for the compliments,... and you know me too well... I only write what I feel.. fiction is not my strong suit. Lauren ... your heart's eyes see and know my intent well.. thank you gentle poetess. Vandana .. thank you dear Maureen... no need to say sorry, the replies often say more than the poetry... but Im sorry you relate as well. thank you for stopping by and sharing. Sen... LOL.. dont worry...I wont say a word and poignant? ... there you go using those big words again...Im gonna tell mom lol and yes... I know that you know,,,,wish we didnt know.... Bill ... you spoil me so...and its is your reply that is extraordinary ... and I thank you very very much. Why does it seem sometimes the one who we need to see us as "extraordinary" are the ones who are the blindest. Why ask why.. right??... for the answers are sometimes "extraordinarally painful" thank you sweet poet sir for making my day. Thank you ALL and love to Poetry Land I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... Your broken heart ... your broken wings. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If I were looking for words to sum up this powerful poem, I'd probably choose your own response "Why does it seem sometimes the one who we need to see us as "extraordinary" are the ones who are the blindest." One verse just really grabs me: "So many questions go unanswered ... or maybe there's just nothing left to say, when silence is the only one speaking ... hearts can hear no reasons to stay. When did his eyes lose their vision ... her reflection is no where to be found, so her eyes then realize ..."the ties that bind" ... now only tie her down." I keep reading it over and over again, knowing I could dither forever trying to decide which statement packs the most truth. *S* But all of them bear sadness and hurt and heartbreak... Well written, JM! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautiful.. simply beautiful. subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
It's one of those things baby.... you don't know you need it till you read it...and then it becomes a part of you.... Love you much SS~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
JM incredible write, and I for one understand every line. Very heartfelt. |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Sad the love was not true. Though maybe the love between the two characters is there , Routines set diffrent ambitions & alliances with purpose hold close. Sad Poem . Take care. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, really loved the flow of this one. The message writes of my life when I was married. Its strange that the love sometimes just disappears... and sometimes to reappear later on but most often too late when that person's gone. I want somebody to whisper in my ear too. Parker |
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