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Forgiveness
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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God demanded and I was cold He spoke of a restriction A parameter around my life A “do not” not a “do” It felt wrong that I was cold A snake slithering around my bones I could see its mark upon my skin And I wanted. Yea I crossed I cannot recall what I did But the snake around my heart Coiled in bundles of constriction Leaves me longing for my Lord I hear promise from the snake My heart feeds it to my brain I am at will and yet deceived For I wanted, am I lost? Consumed by torn of tooth How did I become its prey The word of God is in my hand And I cast amongst the snake Will I not want forgiveness Is restriction upon my heart? Satan devoured my bitter self For my want, at any cost You and I were born together In union we have new life Bound of Church and Christ let in We had rock beneath our feet In subtle slithering motion Temptation writhed its way Restriction upon our lives How the snake found our path At times it was your sight And mine became so short We saw each other’s frailties And the trails upon our rock A lisping hiss upon my ear A restriction upon my heart “Do not offer or accept” Forgiveness makes you weak I’ve been weak since my Lord Lay restriction upon my heart And the snake of my temptation Made bid of simpler way I ask you both, forgiveness God recalls not what I did You and I have hearts at ease The snake slithered upon its way |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is, by far, the most impressive work of yours I have seen, Walt. This is excellent... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's good to forgive...and I like the imagery of the snake..good poem sir. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
High praise from two poet masters o yhu |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I love it when you write like this Walt... |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Waltaroza You have written from original sin all the way to the difficulties of asking forgiveness of the heart. An awesome tail (snake) you have shed. |
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Writer Junior Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 21CA/USA |
Awsome peice of work Walt!! I can always be distracted by love, but eventually I get horney for my creativity. |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Oh Walt, I forgive you for ____________(fill in the blank). Whatever it is you did this time. This is beautifully put. Forgiveness is a release and asking it is also a release. |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Oh Walt, I forgive you for ____________(fill in the blank). Whatever it is you did this time. This is beautifully put. Forgiveness is a release and asking it is also a release. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Thank your wife for the read, ok?...(though, you can thank yourself for the response). This is brilliant. I will pay more attention here on out. Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Seems I have known this, Walt. Very beautiful writing. An honor to read. Hope you're doing well. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and so for those who think that walt's just wayout - here stands affirmation that he's also righton!!!... A standing ovation, my friend..  |
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