This Lovely Vision (repost) (for the ladies)

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Auguste

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By the sea

0 posted 2001-04-14 06:51 PM

This Lovely Vision

by Michael

One day, while sketching at the sea
Breathtaking beauty, golden tan
Approached and asked what it might be
And stood with me upon the sand

So seldom can such beauty be
My heart was beating like a drum
As if she came from out the sea
From nowhere did she seem to come

Her name was Libby and we talked
We seemed to find a common bond
Quite near the foam and spray we walked
Her voice like ripples on a pond

Just barely was she clothed at all
Her body like you see in dreams
Her eyes are what I really saw
She's still a part of me it seems

Her eyes, sweet dew reflecting light
Such peace conveyed within their gaze
More lovely than the stars of night
So lost in them, much like a maze

More like a vision, so like art
Her voice was softly dripping rain
If my eyes closed, would she be there?
Is this a dream, am I still sane?

Our shadows lengthened as we walked
And as we talked of many things
The sun now changed its shift with night
We spoke of long forgotten dreams

As darkness fell I took her hand
So not to lose her in the night
Her touch like silk against my skin
Her fragrance was so much like sight

A little longer did we stroll
With hand in hand along the shore
Now she's embedded in my soul
Oh how we longed for so much more

But part we did, and now I miss
This lovely vision, gone so long
I never touched her lips to kiss
Though in my heart she lives in song

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

inot2B
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1 posted 2001-04-14 07:05 PM

Anyone who could cause someone to write such beauty must of been an angel. If it be true you must go sketch by the sea in hopes of seeing her again.
This was really
awesome.

Chelsea~
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2 posted 2001-04-14 07:09 PM

auguste,

oh so lovely!

Secret Whisper
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Through the Looking Glass

3 posted 2001-04-14 07:21 PM

How lovely! Truly wonderful writing.

"Death marks the beginning, not the end. It is our journey to God." --Billy Graham

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-04-14 07:24 PM

Auguste! Our minds are entwined...and you shall soon...

sea....

Sami
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Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2001-04-14 07:25 PM

you know, the only word i can ever think of to describe my poetry is 'wow'...its just so descriptive and full of feeling...amazing for sure

~Sami

'Sometimes we think it's holding on that makes us strong, but sometimes it's letting go' ~~Sam Ewing

walker
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6 posted 2001-04-14 08:34 PM

Lovely!

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-04-14 08:56 PM

Enjoyed this vision Auguste...James

Martie

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8 posted 2001-04-14 09:00 PM

Micahel--I think your poem may be more lovely than Libby...for in it she remains forever just as she was...beautiful. You have captured romance in this poem for the ladies...thank you.

elizabeth anne
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9 posted 2001-04-14 10:33 PM

Michael..
Very lovely and abit haunting...
I think I know Libby...

Elizabeth Anne

Honeybee
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Ontario, CANADA

10 posted 2001-04-14 10:37 PM

Michael, this is absolutely gorgeous, although laced with yearning and pain! I see that you're a deep romantic like I am. Into my libary this goes~

Take care,
Melissa~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 04-14-2001).]

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

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Melbourne, Australia

11 posted 2001-04-15 07:35 AM

Michael
Once again you have painted such a beautiful picture with your words. Thank you....Sue

Suetang

Kit McCallum

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12 posted 2001-04-15 01:09 PM

"A little longer did we stroll
With hand in hand along the shore
Now she's embedded in my soul
Oh how we longed for so much more"

"But part we did, and now I miss
This lovely vision, gone so long
I never touched her lips to kiss
Though in my heart she lives in song"

Oh Michael, this is simply superb. What wonderful cadence and rhyme! This flowed so beautifully, and the imagery was excellent! I really enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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