Open Poetry #13 |
The Pavement |
RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Pavement My lord, could stones but speak These would attest The truth of all that lies before you. A jest? Thou art quick. And yet, Seamless would their logic be For all know well our masons' skill. Better with the trowel than sword? I yield the point that took my country. But to return. Come, step down To thus inspect the beauty of our native granite. My lord, I mean the stone, not this Peasant. The heat? Of course. I understand. Ferocious can our climate be To Roman blood. Now, as for this threat..... RMW |
||
© Copyright 2001 RMW - All Rights Reserved | |||
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I really like the tone of this, yet, it really is too deep for me. I believe I know what it is about, but not the details at all. |
||
Kay Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 70 |
good classic poetry, I didn't figure it out I just read and let the words fall off my tongue and it is smooth Kay |
||
Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Well written, I liked the archaic feel to this. I'm thinking it has to do with the fall of Rome, but it's been too long since I've been in history to remember details to make me more confident of that. Nonetheless, wonderful writing. *Krista Knutson* |
||
RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Virginia, Kay, and Alwye.....Not quite as successful as I would have liked in capturing the possible air of political exchange between a Scribe (lawyer) and Pilate on what was called the Pavement. The "native granite"...that is, the rejected stone...being the Carpenter. Thank you for your comments. Back to the drawing board. Bob |
||
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Certainly not back to the drawing board...this parchment on blue just moves with the stream and the winds... much too fast... let the waters lie quiet, so that all good might rise back to the top... |
||
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Bob...you are one interesting poet! And the scriptural references are notoriously difficult to do, (God knows) I continue to enjoy your amazing work! |
||
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Never back to the drawing boards RMW ... this was splendid! You've captured this beautifully, and I loved the tone in your phrasing, really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
||
latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
heavy, interesting history that I'm not up on. LP |
||
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I love the depth of your mind...the strength of your words...dont change...k????? |
||
⇧ top of page ⇧ | ||
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |