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Surrounding Cooperation
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Surrounding Cooperation |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 along the edge of solitude I walked to the rhythm of our heartbeats... even with arms outstretched, I could barely maintain my balance... the earth-shattering sparkle in your eye fully captured my thoughts... the enveloping caress in your embraces has illuminated any darkness in my night sky... the moon and stars fall at your feet even before you wake... the mystery in the distant lighthouse could never compare to the captivation of your gaze... the raging waves of the sea have calmed at the sight of you... but the flutter of a thousand butterflies will always get the best of my composure... not one cloud dares to appear when you surround me with your affection... each sound in the night collaborates to harmonize with the endless passion between us. -kh 04/12/01 to be with you... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this goes way beyond beautiful.....I like this very much!  SEA |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
not one cloud dares to appear when you surround me with your affection... I am line selecting tonight..and I believe in this one so much...beautiful Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
So pretty! You're a lucky one to find someone who makes you feel this way. I like this ~Becky~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the moon and stars fall at your feet even before you wake... the mystery in the distant lighthouse could never compare to the captivation of your gaze... the raging waves of the sea have calmed at the sight of you... but the flutter of a thousand butterflies will always get the best of my composure... ========================== very very cool imagery SP I love the ethereal and elmental use of metaphor here.. the celestial essence of it. your work always has wonderful poetic phrases and vocabulary but they are unique and they are never cliche' or over used.. "has illuminated any darkness in my night sky... "each sound in the night collaborates" and you also write with a poetic intelligence and grace far beyond your years. very cool write here... when you write like this... I dont even notice your not rhyming   baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found ... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
SEA: thank you so much! I am glad you like this! Maureen: well, thanks! I am happy to see that you enjoyed this!  Becky: yes, I do feel very lucky...thanks so much! JM: ...yeah, yeah...I tried...I really tried to rhyme, but I didn't want to ruin my thoughts by forcing something that just wasn't going to come out right...know what I mean? Is that a good enough excuse??  but, thank you, m'friend, for your encouraging replies...it makes my day to see your name on my posts because you always have the best things to say!  ok, ok...I will keep trying with the rhyme...blah blah blah...  sp  to be with you... |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
solitide...darkness...love... Beautiful poem, snowpants, love it! |
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