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PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-04-09 01:53 PM

Strip away the dirt from me
That always holds me down
Wash me clean completely
Let the ashes fall to the ground
Give comfort from your arms
Shelter from the cold wind blowing
With unbound hope and whispered charms
Renew blood that had stopped flowing
Better to feel pain from stricken heart
Than to laugh instead of cry
Better to let things run their course
Than to feel dead instead of alive

One touch is all that is needed
Upon the heart, death defeated

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2001-04-09 01:55 PM

So very well done! I love the imagery you used to describe this

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-04-09 02:00 PM

ooh. ya made me say "ooh."

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-04-09 02:03 PM

Oh, yes!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-04-09 02:04 PM

PK, you have done it again. And well done!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2001-04-09 04:33 PM

........I'm touching..........
......can you feel me?.........

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

6 posted 2001-04-09 05:19 PM

One touch, indeed...one elusive touch. Loved every word!

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

7 posted 2001-04-09 05:34 PM

Thank you all very, very much.

SEA, I can't feel anything, I'm numb from the shock of your touch. *L*

Doug Pretorius
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 81
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2001-04-09 05:48 PM

I found the sentences to be abrupt and choppy, but it actually worked out well! It complemented the content perfectly.

Excellent piece PK!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-04-09 06:16 PM

one touch indeed. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-06-03

Posts 661
Tennessee

10 posted 2001-04-09 06:18 PM

Absolutely wonderful!

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