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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Oblivious A hushed silence on the ship we sail Your arms push my back against the rail It is that inevitable moment of truth You only see in movies as a youth The sunset meets the ocean I feel your growing emotions Whispering words I’ve long to hear As your arms draw me near The world stops as two hearts beat Alone we stand in this retreat Dolphins nearby do their freedom dance I stare, lost in a turbulent trance The tear in my eye must speak Oblivious, you wipe the sting from my cheek Marina July 2000 It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I like this version, I don't remember it from before. Must be losing it. James |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The world stops as two hearts beat Alone we stand in this retreat" Wonderful visuals Marina! You set the mood beautifully in this tranquil piece, very much enjoyed this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is an excellent rewrite. . . it flows wonderfully. . . I like it. . . Welcome back Marina. . . we've missed you. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You have been missed...and this is lovely...looking forward to seeing you here often |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The world stops as two hearts beat Alone we stand in this retreat Dolphins nearby do their freedom dance I stare, lost in a turbulent trance The tear in my eye must speak Oblivious, you wipe the sting from my cheek =============== I fondly remember this lovely gift of imagery laced emotion... kissed with romantic notion. So very nice to see your name here Marina-girl... hope you are recovering well and can come back more often... you indeed have been missed, even thos vampy friends of your have been missed  LOLsend me a line when you feel up to it and let me know how you are ..k take care sweet poet. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'The sunset meets the ocean I feel your growing emotions Whispering words I’ve long to hear As your arms draw me near The world stops as two hearts beat Alone we stand in this retreat' Thanks for posting this one...I didn't have the pleasure of reading it the first time around, I guess...wonderful write, Marina! sp  to be with you... |
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