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Her suffering |
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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
In her heart I am not, but in her trap I am caught. So what am I to do? My time on earth is at a few. I give her many chances to love. I guess i'll need help from above. Can I change someone with a rock hard soul? If not then I guess i'll pay the toll. But I then think I should say [edit] her. but the death of my soul would accure. So I will sit here and be abused So she can stay forever amused. Soon enough I will be strong.. And something in her life will go dreadfully wrong. For she will soon find out a heart is no toy. and she will find in her life there is no joy. Then she will know what she has lost... and fineally she will pay loves dreadful cost. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 06-18-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I've seen this in action a few times...James |
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allis4angel Member
since 2001-04-10
Posts 82Portugal |
So do I... Nice poem. Thanks for sharing it. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hi there. I've edited your poem because profanity isn't allowed in our forums - part of the guidelines. I suggest you familiarise yourself with these to avoid future editing by myself and other moderators. Thanks! Severn |
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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
no problem.. I thought I edited it myself.. sorry bout that. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Did you replace the word with asterixes? The inbuilt profanity filter does that, so asterixes don't really serve as an 'edit' per se...thanks for you compliance, I really appreciate it...  K |
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BitterSmoke Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 54 |
My mother asked me the other day when I was going to get another girlfriend. I told her "Woman ain't no good". She did'nt get it, but the old men at the bar understand me perfectly. |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
good write../Drew/ |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
I liked this  --but i dont understand what u meant bitter--lol  LOVE ELMO <3 |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
hey this one is doing bamn good../Drew/ |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I loved this ~ and bitter, al women aren't that bad.  I'm not... (I hope not) LoL |
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