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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-05-24 04:39 AM

Sing seductive
Swing my sleep,
Awaken me to dreams,
In shallow breath I keep.
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For I am lost now,
Grazing grass forlornly so,
Awaken me to dream,
With shallow gaze I go.
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I seek not the path,
To heal myself, but revel in unrest,
Awaken me to dream,
Heel of despair hard pressed.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Don't try to analyze my mood,
For you can see much too soon,
Awaken me to dream,
Swish..swish...the dying bloom.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Don't curtly offer your advice,
I see you standing there,
Awaken me to dream,
I must touch the glare.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Don't curl your disgust around my neck,
I haven't need for your disdain,
Awaken me to dream,
So I may feel my pain.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Don't lure me here and smile,
I'll take my shrouds back now,
Awaken me to dream,
For I've forgotten how.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Black Lace and hidden eyes for show,
Further pressing, my attire,
Awaken me to dreams,
My spirit it doth require.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Scorn again if that you must,
Or keep that hand full ready,
Awaken me to dreams,
So I may lean as I'm unsteady.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Readily Darkness I take your hand,
Although you know I must return,
Awaken me to dream again,
So I may simply mend my burn.

Snowdwen
Member

since 2000-09-16

Posts 75
Louisiana

1 posted 2001-05-24 04:48 AM

Wow! Yet another good pome.. I rather enjoy your work.. keep it up.. I hope to see more of it in Dark Passions 3.

"You live you learn and life moves on"

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

2 posted 2001-05-24 02:30 PM

I seek not the path,
To heal myself, but revel in unrest,
Awaken me to dream,
Heel of despair hard pressed.

Tempress, powerful writing here. We all have our dark days the challenge is not to lose sight of the light that finally comes. Take care

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

3 posted 2001-05-24 03:05 PM

This is VERY GOOD!! Deffinately going to my library... i love :
"Don't curl your disgust around my neck,
I haven't need for your disdain,
Awaken me to dream,
So I may feel my pain."
That has so much immagery and so much sense,a masterpeice this one!!

samantha¤

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

4 posted 2001-05-24 11:54 PM

"Readily Darkness I take your hand,
Although you know I must return,
Awaken me to dream again,
So I may simply mend my burn. "
thus proving my theory, that even your "dark" work is still lyrical and beautiful....outstanding.
-Napalm

I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM!
"Why do i smell something burning?!?"
I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM!

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

5 posted 2001-05-25 04:29 AM

Very, very nice.

You asked:
"Tell me what it makes you feel or how it makes you feel..Be honest..I dare you. "

OK, I feel I must stop writing.
I can read yours, I loved the way you use words.

Thanks for sharing.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-05-25 11:17 PM

your burn must heal and not mend. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2001-05-25 11:48 PM

I can't pick one line I like better than another..well done as Sven has said

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2001-05-27 06:09 AM

Agree with Sven that line says it all, and this poem makes you "feel" that burn, well done!

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angelbear
Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 139
North East, USA

9 posted 2001-05-27 05:00 PM

Don't curl your disgust around my neck,
I haven't need for your disdain,
Awaken me to dream,
So I may feel my pain.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

What a wonderful poem.. The pain is so real; The above line stands out for me..

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

poni
Junior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 21
Nebraska

10 posted 2001-05-27 10:56 PM

deeply moving...will be looking for more...pen on!

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

11 posted 2001-05-29 03:23 AM

very nice and written quite powerful

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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