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Black Music Mood |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Why do you waste these batteries? When you know the song is dead The river with the bended knee Snakes, entangles through my head Swallow smiles like ocean water Spit the river, the world is dry The core is heating, uprising, fallen Heave the chest and slow to die The skull splits and the lines at fault Diverge, transform and then collide Soon before the death angel swings Will you switch to the other side Black music mood, dips, bends her knee Timber, tinder, tender, embers The sun, it's worth, the dogs, the earth Oxygen chokes soon surrenders Lay on gurney, fall to wasteland The waves are shrilling, all receding In break neck speed of disrepair Find internal depths of bleeding Charge your mind and fall behind Batter ram, this song is dead Sever the waste and go with haste The disease is now widespread [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-01-2001).] |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i know,i don't use the word "cool" very often,but this poem is trés cool!! I loved it,it suits my mood magnificently and i like it's mystery,it's a little enigmatic,and beautiful in a decaying kind of way. How come i don't see more off your stuff in these parts? sammi¤ much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Great composition, Walt. I particularly liked the lines you fetched your title from: "Black music mood, dips, bends her knee Timber, tinder, tender, embers The sun, it's worth, the dogs, the earth Oxygen chokes soon surrenders" This is a very dark verse, my man. Thanks.  "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well my friend, love these lines..... Black music mood, dips, bends her knee Timber, tinder, tender, embers The sun, it's worth, the dogs, the earth Oxygen chokes soon surrenders what a pic it paints! Great poem. Maree |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank yo uall yuh got tired of rejection in open with these. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well Walt come HERE anytime you want a dark post, this is great...Charge your mind and fall behind Batter ram, this song is dead Sever the waste and go with haste The disease is now widespread...... That ending cinches it for me!! Well done. Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
This is deadly and lethal! i picture this person with his eyes closed and in a comfortable position. He begins to shake his head left to right as the "Black Music Mood" unfolds inside. "Oxygen chokes soon surrenders" is crazy! However, In break neck speed of disrepair Find internal depths of bleeding is my favorite graphic! I read this one a few times. awesome |
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~K Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 104 |
Well...all I can say is Thank you!!! In replying to my post in open 23 you helped me to zero in on this Fantastic poem I might not have found otherwise!!! Delightfully chilling!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Why do you waste these batteries? When you know the song is dead" Powerful line, I am glad K brought this back, I never read this one before. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-16-2002 02:00 AM).] |
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