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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
disciple dipped in sacchrine ten less than twenty days ago turning the wheels of condition in flattery bashed brushing eyes will you, will you fix my will for a new disposition? just whispering breezes and breathing symptoms a delicate lack of dedication disciplined dramatic screams counting out of turn two four six eight eleven less than yesterday * cool chicas babysoft buns and bathroom grafitti hang on, little flavor ease back before you go take a swalow of you ego-driven ability buddy binges pretty purges and mechanical therapy hang on, little disorder ease below average lies take a swallow of your hopitalized agility * all the other girls twice as nice as thin brought about a methodical cure sing for me, sister let your hands fall frail just raise my head above the water and let the whispers drown all the other girls twice as nice as thin brought without a medicinal cure sing for me, sister let your ideals fall frail just look myself in reflection and starve the whispers dry * i'm not i'm not i'm just little i'm just framed in a small package without hips without breast implants without nutrition i'm not i'm not i'm just timid i'm just strong in a weak package without thighs without limited space without dedication i'm not i'm not i'm just hungry i'm just ugly in a pretty package without life without painful ease without starvation without starvation i'm not anything * Victims, aren't we all? |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
wow,this was incredible,i dig this style,you've made it very tense,you've made it something ugly wrapped in pretty papers and tied with pretty strings,very well done. sammi much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"disciplined dramatic screams" I like this line because it stands out from the other stanzas and is set aside - I'm guessing for a reason of significance! This is a brilliant poem and I enjoyed it very much. Keep up the good work ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
A real "eye-opener", Amy. Very positive and powerful expressions of otherwise negative energy. You have channeled it very creatively. Another fine work. Thanks.  "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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