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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
infection admits this girl is just a phase a poor man must contemplate from time to time her beauty arrives too late to share skin with easy needs scraped along your fingernails to remember her name not in her eyes not in her movement the girl next door truth dipped in sugar just an easy kind of something sitting on the couch without much thought about her appeal she's a memory a photograph hanging the scar on a dancing dirty table with your intentions in mind the center of the world spins around her scent just for that moment when she sighs you'll have her too soon and leave the hesitation satisfied never realizing she comes like charity dropped in a coffee can pennies for her thought and remedy for infection before you hate the sound of her silent voice |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
What can I say? This is really a deep one. I'm still absorbing its subtle impact. Very good work, Thanks.  "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
hmmm i think i'll have to read this one again to get the full idea,it's very interesting,i love your ideas!! swamp much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
i don't say this very often, but i really loved this ... intricate flow 'til the end ... and easy to read ... just a very well done piece ... |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
thanks all for a moment i feel a bit of content amyx Victims, aren't we all? |
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svandersaar Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 40 |
Some interesting, innovative phrases... this is work with a few great pieces, but overall, your message seems lost between little skips of imagery, and shifts of thought (which may appear clear to you but leave the reading wandering). Try reading over this from an outside perspective and see if you can 'clear' things a bit. Still, I enjoyed. Stacey |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
I'll agree with you most won't understand really, they won't but I thank you very much for the advise my mind is my flaw my purpose now is to explain in... thankyou!!!! Victims, aren't we all? |
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