Dark Poetry #3 |
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But of Course... |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
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…and if sorrow knocked on my door would I let her in? But of course I would And I would be comforted with every sin. …and if time stood still would I place your soul up the sill? But of course I would And I would watch it choke until I had my fill. …and if pain touched me would I embrace it with cold skin? But of course I would And I would rock it gently until it wept and begin again. …and if death held out his hand would I dance? But of course I would And I would curtsy low at such a wondrous chance. "There is an alter ego which |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
mmmm,this was kind of sassy tongue in cheek dark poetry,i love that style it particularly thrilling.ha. Loved this poem,esp the last three or four lines,lovely lovely!! sammi¤ much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was great! I loved it. The style is perfect. Nicely done. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Of course I loved it. Has that "I am my own woman" feel to it. Nice work. ![]() With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sounds angry, my friend. I do like it though. It fits well with my conflicting moods. Weird to feel gentle and angry at the same time isn't it? Your work gets better and better. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
I thank you all for your kind words, means more to me than I could ever tell you. Until...ali "There is an alter ego which |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I llke this...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Is this poem knife edged in irony...but of course. Can I relate to it...but of course. Did it make my morning brighter...indeed it did. good poem. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Nice inner monologue. I liked it very much. ~Broken~ Base not your joy upon the deeds of others, for what is given can be taken away. -Peter Steele |
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