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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
Lead me through cobblestone streets barefoot, waist deep in sleep where rice fields wave tall become shadow puppets behind fluttering eyelids compelled by skillful hands, dark magicians bunraku, joruri, shamisen* Lead me over midnight dew sweet grass, pink gardens now, a wasteland as far as the mind can see thirsty and anxious home is a far away place where sleepwalker awakes Lead me to scalloped cliff edges fishing villages, slumber become a great white owl spring out arms open embrace the sky the blooming mushroom at last, sleepwalker can fly =================== bunraku = puppeteer in Japanese puppet theater, usually dressed in black joruri = the narrator/story teller in bunraku theater shamisen = musician in bunraku theater, also provides wind and rain sounds [This message has been edited by Jellybean King (edited 03-19-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is great. I will try to find some time later to do a critique. Thanks for posting.  K...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey, love the imagery! great writing  Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Mercahnt [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-17-2001).] |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
this is very well composed ... the imagery in the last stanza is remarkable for its active voice ... i like this piece. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
*sigh* Beautiful! Terrific as always...~ Tara ~ may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful imagery that can be construed so many different ways!! Bravo hon Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...James |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
this was so interesting!! i really loved it,there seems to be a burst of extremely creative,almost experimental poetry in dark this week,loved this poem!! swamp much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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