Dark Poetry #3 |
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One Too Many |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
"One Too Many" I remember the guys Chanting chug, chug Chug and the next Morning that toilet I sure did hug My eyes were glassy My head hazy I said to myself man I must be crazy The taste of the alchol Brings back the memories Of your death, they seem Not to want to leave my Head, I wonder was it Something I said to bring You to the end One of the guys came in And sat on the couch And said one too many My friend, But, I didn't Care I was in total despair I knew he was right I'm sure I looked a sight We had drank all night And when I woke up to the Light, my head hurt so bad I was sure I'd been in a Fight, and then I rememebered You died By: Lisa Kennedy ![]() ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
alot of emotion. good job P.L.U.R. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
OH WOW--I wasn't expecting that--great work--great imagery--loved it--LOVE ELMO <3 |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
DJLI: Thanks for reading it. I'm glad you liked it.Take care. ![]() qtoieelmo: Thanks! Yeah a lot of emotions were used, its a very strong poem. I guess that it's good that the end was a suprize. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Lisa ![]() this is great, though sad at the end, which I didnt expect either. wonderful writing m'dear ![]() Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-10-2001).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lisa- powerful poem sug. many things remind me of her death too ![]() have the memories sweetie...and she will always live in our hearts. never forget we have an Angel above watching over us. ![]() love ya hon. amy ![]() "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Dark Angel: Thanks for reading. I'm glad that I didn't have it spelled our right away what was going to happen. Suspense is always good I think. Take care. ![]() Amy: Hey! Thanks for reading and responding to my poem. However, this poem was not about mom. Not about anyone really, it's just a poem. But what you said is true and for that I am forever grateful! ![]() ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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