Dark Poetry #3 |
Split Persona |
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I do I can Get the best of you Hurt me Break me Run away with you Sentiment and foreplay I hear it deep inside Lovely lady Pretty girl I dont want to see you cry Silence and poor aptitude Strangled with an attitude A stencil in this world Scribble out the heart I rape myself and fall apart I do I can Get the best of you Hurt me Break me Run away with you An impulse, sweet desire Paradise built on fire These feelings take away Concentrate, a better life I'd see you everyday Yin to yang the atmosphere The one you never hear Gorgeous you And perfect soul A flawless body too I do I can Get the best of you Hurt me Break me Run away with you Someone else, another place I'd love you even more could have been Should've been Dirty little whore Best if I can do the most Kiss you on your lips Your bleeding face Apology My bloody finger tips I do I can Get the best of you Hurt me Break me Reappear without you a trickle of music from a well |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Craig: I loved this . . I rape myself and fall apart what an amazing line . . . keep pouring your heart out please xxoo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The repetition in this not only drove the point home, but made gave this the essence of a piece of music. And sue quoted my favorite line too. Enjoyed the read m'friend. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx littlewing, your a really good poet and I enjoy your poems too. Thanx serenity, Actually I put some guitar riffs to it yesterday. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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Insomniac Cat Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 69The Land of the Dadaists |
I too liked the rhythym of this poem. Something you could sing or rap. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx insomniac cat- its nice to see someone else enjoyed this piece. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
Dude! I want to hear it!! I put my own riffs in as I was reading! Good Job!! Very well put together and looked great as I read it... Thanx!!! Click |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow, this reminds me of rap or something...groovy job, lookin good bro =) "The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
thanx River. Click if you want to hear it e-mail me and after i pratice a lil bit maybe something can work out so that can happen. a trickle of music from a well |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
you get me every time...damn oh, and your name is still my favorite and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful. |
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