Dark Poetry #3 |
LXIV (Ashes in Love) |
eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
The fingers of this hand with which I write- Through those infrequent smiles which fail to live, Can it be right to give what i can give, Is it so that life, gives life, that gives life. Sorrow has shut me safe in loves device Through the ashen greys, I shudder it off- Lift my heart up high as it on a loft, None of these thoughts are enough to suffice Yet, love, real love is beautiful indeed- I’ll never give your lock of hair away- So today, today, I will dream a day, My love is but a dribble, a mere bead. I lift my heart upwardly, solemnly The ashes at my feet behold and see. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
*sigh* Perfect title. So much that could be said about this piece. Your every word is as an inch upon the dagger which is thrust into the heart of the lover betrayed. And yet there is also hope in the spaces, the breaths, if you will... As though each moment holds something with twice as much hope as was given the moment before. Beautiful and breath-taking, you stole a few pieces of my broken heart with this poem. I loved it. *add* (if you could only see how much room you take up in my library...) |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Amazing work.. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Just beautiful...............! Thanks for sharing with all of us. -Shara- ) Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! [This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-18-2003 11:28 AM).] |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Outstanding ending eor. Your poem beginnings and endings are making you a master of what lies in between. Great write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
As the others said I enjoyed this to. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
Alicia-thanks you, you always have something nice to say...and thanks for adding, you do take up a lot of space in my library too. Meg-my work is nowhere near as amazing as yours, thanks for stopping by. Terri-as always wiht the kind words, tanks you so much Poe-thanks my man, i have been trying latley, but nothing seems to fit. i have all these boxes i have to stay in for my classes as you can probally see form my last few posts...grrr Craig-thanks for stopping by as alwyas thank you everybody "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
"is it so that life, gives life, that gives life. Really like this line eor. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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