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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
A broken heart and broken thought broken children and broken bought I don't know what''s wrong with me do you? I don't know what to do what do you do? how do I rise above this indomitable depression my thoughts are lonely and mind confused oh if only I could find you you who are you? from whence do you come why haven't you come for me I'm still alone lonely as the majestic oak hundreds of years old and surrounded by housing settlements and cements nothing alive nearby and children climb thy limbs and leave thee to thy pain oh if only I could find you oh if only I weren't so afraid broken peices floating round that one's me and that one's thou I am alone and yet surrounded by empty death and deadly tears where are you now? Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last. |
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serametheicebound New Member
since 2003-09-04
Posts 8South Africa-Free State |
This is tight.I love yo signature as well.Keep on writing U inpire me. The Conquest Is My Daily Testament |
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Mor-Estal Landis Junior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 10Luca, Ventoren |
That was awesome BP, You need to write out and keep more of your stuff though. I love writing your works, and from now on yo ucan read one of mine for every one of yours I read. Mor-Estal Landis, The Dark Star |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Alicia - beautiful right here excellent: lonely as the majestic oak hundreds of years old and surrounded by housing settlements and cements nothing alive nearby and children climb thy limbs and leave thee to thy pain just perfect xxoo |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
"broken peices floating round that one's me and that one's thou I am alone and yet surrounded by empty death and deadly tears" Whoa... Just.... whoa..... I feel like you are inside my mind with this piece, it's almost scary, in a good way. :p I'm sorry I haven't e-mailed you back yet, I've been working like you would not believe. I love the way this piece was phrased, it flowed so well, and had a subject matter that seems fresh, though penned for years and years. I really enjoyed this and am adding it to my library. ~Alicia |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
It might help if I actually clicked the button though, huh? :p |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
I enjoyed the imagery here. Nice write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Thanx all for replying Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last. |
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