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The Ghost |
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Black_Knight Junior Member
since 2003-09-04
Posts 23England |
The Ghost It is sometimes as though I alone can recall my life as unfinished. Although I touched many lives, my time, it seems, has past. In the place where once I lived there dwells another man now. He plays with the children I fathered, and is loved by she who was my wife. And life goes on... My once-wife lives and loves with another. And life goes on... The children grow with other company. And life goes on... Time and tide wait for no man. And life goes on... So I, who goes not, am the ghost. My existance rolls onward, and seeds I sowed bear fruit. The paths I laid lead as promised to the glories fortold. Yet alone am I, upon those paths built for a family group. And trophies and titles are naught to the touch of a ghost. And life goes on... My associates thrive and flourish. And life goes on... Momentum carries it past me. And life goes on... Time and tide wait for no man. And life goes on... Leaving only the shackled ghost who cannot. I am the spirit, of a man who defied odds and survived. The ruined child, bitter youth, and self-made man. He lived to bring others, the things he'd never known. He is strong, he'll arise, and he shall leave me behind. And life goes on... As an alternate life dies. And life goes on... Though the husband, father, dreamer does not. And life goes on... Time and tide wait for no man. And life goes on... Leaving the ghost of what could have been as no more than words on a page. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this was so sad, but your not the only one that feels like this, I hope you write many more to me writing in an outlet to your soul helps cleanse it, like taking a nice warm bath, strive to go forward. take care Rose |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent piece of work BK! Welcome to Passions.. I'm sure you will love it here. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ammon: Welcome to PIP! I must say , I do know this feeling well kind of like drifting along . . . This is a brilliant masterpiece and an outstanding entrance I am in awe of this . . . truly Please keep posting Check your email for a greeting from everyone here at Passions! xxoo |
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Black_Knight Junior Member
since 2003-09-04
Posts 23England |
Thank you all for the responses here. It is much appreciated. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I am the spirit, of a man who defied odds and survived. The ruined child, bitter youth, and self-made man. He lived to bring others, the things he'd never known. He is strong, he'll arise, and he shall leave me behind Black_Knight, this is an excellent write. I'm really looking forward to reading more of your work. Welcome to Passions In Poetry. I hope than you enjoy it here.  Thanks, Ethel |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I don't know if you are speaking from actual experience or are so in tune with what does happen all too often. Sadly this makes for great poetry  I have seen this in restructured families, and it is so sad that divorce causes lovers to forget they are also parents, and there is always room for one more good one! Excellent write, and these lines really hit hard on your point that was well made indeed.And life goes on... Time and tide wait for no man. And life goes on...  |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Black_Knight: This is a most moving story and impressively written. Hope you will enjoy this site and give us all a chance to read more of your work. Betty Lou Hebert |
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ShadowRaven Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 51 |
This is beautiful, I enjoyed it greatly. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent expression ... a very thought-provoking piece, Black Knight. Too often, we reach the goals we have set out for ourselves, yet lose sight of the foundations and reasons we set them for in the beginning. Very much enjoyed. Welcome to Passions ... I hope to read more from you.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
There's never a way to foresee what will happen in life. It's hard to take, and the best I have been able to come up with is we just have to learn from our mistakes, and do the best we can the next time. Feeling like there will be no next time is the hardest part to get through, or for me it is, and was. And time does help to heal. It will get better...you'll see. It does.   SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is quite a wonderful entree to our Passionate walls, Black Knight - It's a story that surely permeates the lives of multitudes of people in today's divorce-ridden society. You'll find a cozy home here among us, BK - Settle in and make yourself comfortable. I'm looking forward to reading lots more of your good work...  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very well done and something with which I empathize ~wranx |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Who cannot empathize with a writing such as this, when it has been laid out, step by step, we only need to see if we are still in our own shoes as yours are a good fit. Well done, Sir. Welcome to Passions! Come to Open sometime, sit in the light.  Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Haunting. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What makes this poem so interesting is how it can be read. I, for example, read it differently than the others have, based on their responses... I read it as the spirit of the man who has changed..or been reduced to less than what it was. The man goes on, still the husband, the father, the family man...but the dreamer in him, the adventurer, the man reaching for greatness, the explorer....has dissipated and reduced him to the life of a mere mortal. He recognizes that he is less than he intended to be - a ghost of the man who dreamed of greatness. I'm sure I'm wrong in my assessment....but that doesn't matter. I can read it that way and make it fit and when a poem has the power to allow individuals to decipher it in different ways it is a very good piece of writing. This one qualifies....welcome to our little place.  |
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Black_Knight Junior Member
since 2003-09-04
Posts 23England |
Thank you all so much for the warm and enthusiastic welcome. Balladeer, you see rightly that there is a second level, in that in 'moving on' with life sometimes, one leaves an older, possibly more innocent, possibly more inspired, even less jaded, self behind - a ghost, and a sacrifice to moving on. We all leave many selves behind us, some are simply like shed skins we have outgrown, others are more worthy of the phrase "burying the past", and it feels for a while as though something has died, and we only move on when the mourning is done. Just once, I wanted to leave a epitaph for something that passed, a few words for the parts of the man that could not move on with him. Thanks to everyone for their time and consideration of this piece. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Life does have ghost-like aspects and some are just exactly as you have said. This piece seems to have a definite and solid structure. I enjoyed reading. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
BK, brilliantly written work of the ghosts of the past and future from the path not taken. Welcome, I look forward to reading more of you. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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