Dark Poetry #3 |
A comment on the EVILS of substance abuse |
Marian's Lover Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 15 |
ANOTHER DAY... It's twilight and I wake up to another day My stormy sea of yesterday left 'pon the shelf; I start out with my candy cane and I'm O.K. To face another day of murdering myself. The sight of bottles mounted up the night before Does nothing to appease my pain or rid my ache; I get no compensation for my throbbing sore, Just stay to watch the weather break and lie awake. My eyelids drooping, I can barely see a thing And stumble over what is left upon the floor; It ceases to intrigue me what my day will bring - Or take and destroy like it's always done before. To have no inspiration and without a clue My motto's been to live and steal away the fun; Sometimes I wonder what the hell I'm gonna do The war ain't over - maybe it has just begun. I'm walking on a cold plateau within myself To search me for the victim and the reason why; Then, all my aggravations tumble from the shelf - A barren desperation I cannot deny. If there is such a purpose let it be well-known To all who come To all who stay To all who leave: I'll never be its punching bag Or grinding stone, And how they ever thought it so I can't conceive. I'm nobody's whipping boy Or (deleted)to wear and tear You cannot use me to repay your debts and bills; The price to pay, if done so, will be fair and square - I am the Renegade who sees And duly kills... Welcome to the Forum. As you will see profanity, even disguised with asterisks or written backwards is not allowed. Please check your PiP Guidelines for more info. Thanks! [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love your poem--I understand it--and if you are easily offended by editing, I suggest you might try a different phrasing. but I do understand the desolation of feeling "souless" in the face of addiction--and I feel you have much, much more to say.. Welcome! I look forward to reading more. Oh. Almost forgot. The ADDENDUM? [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
a very well written piece.... the addendum baffles me, though... is that some private language you have with yourself? LOL anyway... killing yourself slowly is never any fun.... i know about this... yep.... hard to admit, but i do... thanks for writing for many |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i thought this was well written,terribly dreary,but that's really the only way to express it isn't it? I have a theory that every poet has his/her poison,whether it be a physical drug or mental poison,this was a thought provoking poem,and very effective,the addendum didn't fool me though,i suppose it's all those years back in 6th and 7th grade when i had an obsession with writing in my journals only in that form,heehee samantha much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Marian's Lover Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 15 |
Thanks guys - I appreciate it. The only guarantee in Life, is Death. - The Lord Buddha |
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