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One Million Miles
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One Million Miles |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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White porcelin looming lost inside I am this hollow sanctuary The water has gone cold an hour ago The tears which grace my face fall freely now salty and bitter upon my lips have long since mingled with water that barely shrouds this shell which I call myself Standing but ten feet away we are one million miles apart |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Swallowed hard. Choked up is how this feels. This is not a fun place to be, and it brought tears to my eyes just to read. Sorry you have to feel this even enough to have to write it if it's not a personal experience of your own. Whoever feels this knows it's not a place to want to visit much less have to live with it, and live there.  Bless ya, SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Its almost like youre describing what its like to be dead. Gone forever. Craig a trickle of music from a well |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
hmmm...gentle, deep, oddly comforting. I loved this piece. Great job. Lex  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Loved the ivory and your ending.... You're a solid writer tweets, and you're so groovy baby!!! Liked this, lots~  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You're not supposed to let your bath water go tepid. It's the HOT bath that relaxes! *smile* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Shara . . . what a beautiful name you have there This actually was last year but the memory is still much alive thank you Craig - Goddd you got it - that's exactly how I felt thank you Lex - oddly comforting, yes, this place where I was in was a great place of comfort thank you Hey Bluesy - ya saw that claw foot huh? good eyes . . . *smile* tweets xxoo Ed - *smile* I fill it up with HOT water now, it never goes cold anymore thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sue...feeling every word...this touches... Hugs to you, lady...  "Deep inside this armor, the warrior is a child." |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i would make sure you always had hot water  adding this   "There never was a genius without a tincture of madness." |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
hey wonderful write... i really enjoyed it... the ending was awesome it was the killer part, all endings have to be really good cuz they leave you with a memory of it.. if you understood that, i barely did but im sleep deprived so its ok right? -lance |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
great poem, sometimes it does seem that way, funny how being so close to someone brings distance at the same time. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Real nice job w/this write lw. The flow was superb. I didn't want to pause once. Very nice reader captivation. Real nice poem. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Great poem. I'm not thinking well right now otherwise I would say more I don't know what I did wrong but the fae are after me now. Faeries can be so irritable. |
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Lady Godiva Junior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 35at the bottom of your glass |
You are simply amazing with your words...this Lady offically has fallen off of her horse in awe...good thing I have long hair |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
You already know my thoughts... We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you so much Vicky You are so sweet Matt - thank you Lance, I know exactly what you mean, I call it the punch . . . thank you Rose . . . I know kind of ironic, isnt it? thank you Thank you poe, the flow is so important to me teen - you have said quite enough . . . ahaha I never think straight thank you Brad . . . that I do, that I do - thank you always so sweet Lady - my oh my . . . well pick yourself up and dust yourself off, we dont want that hair getting mussed up now, do we?  thank you Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (09-04-2003 09:57 PM).] |
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Dreamer@ Junior Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 38Denmark |
Sometimes miles are short ! Though we dont know about it. If maybe we sometimes just pushed abit extra i think we would win. Though its only a thought of going to were we seek. Nice poem Dreamer Life is for mee to be ! |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I just wanted to read again. Craig a trickle of music from a well |
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PouringJewels Member
since 2003-09-18
Posts 158Maryland |
your not tasting salty tears anymore my new found friend |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
Good write...I could hear the water (tears?) drip,---drip, Such hollow feeling...distant..Damn! I can almost smell the minerals in the water? Good Job! Thanx for sharing!! Click |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
*grins* need i say anything at all besides the fact that i completely agree with everyone that has already posted? lovin it sis. God Bless. "The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle |
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