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Dark Poetry #3

Schoolyard Warzone

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

0 posted 2003-08-28 03:36 AM

So put your gun in my face
Let the bullets fly, into this space
You’ve got your reason
But you’ve got no “why”
This is just a clash
A schoolyard bash
Shoot it up for cash
So put your gun in my face
Let the bullets fly, into this space
You’ve got your answer
But you don’t know why
This is just a grudge
A classroom smudge
You became the judge
So put your gun away today
All the metal won’t make it go away
You’ve got your soul
And you just want out
There’s another way
The world doesn’t have to
End today…

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2003-08-29 01:07 AM

Ryan,
nice message,
too many kids being lost too stupidity
nice flow too
xxoo

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2003-08-29 07:21 AM

guns and spelling bees, dont seem to match.
no more columbines......please
timely words, schools round the corner

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

3 posted 2003-08-29 07:41 AM

Sad.. it seems almost like a song..

sigh..

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-08-29 07:17 PM

no the world does not have to end today, violence never solves a thing, great write. very timley

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

5 posted 2003-08-29 07:27 PM

Very, truly interesting.

You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

6 posted 2003-08-31 10:20 PM

All the metal won't make it go away.
I loved this line. Very true hatter.
All kids are not so ignorant.
I'd like to think I'm living proof.

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

7 posted 2003-09-01 04:36 AM

I tried to take the subject matter and make it fresh, I hope I accomplished that. Although this poem is very in your face, I think in the end it's just saying there are other ways. A gun and a bullet isn't the way to solve problems. Thanks all.

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