Dark Poetry #3 |
The Dager |
DarkPoetess New Member
since 2003-08-18
Posts 9PA, USA |
Yeah, I know it's sucky, but tell me what you think anyway. LOL, thanks. ~*~Dark Poetess~*~ The glinting dager in the dark of night, A piercing scream, unsettling fright, Bring back back the pain of what was undured, The disease that was uncured. As she crawled about the floor, And her blood began to pour, All the scars upon her face, Her very memory a raw disgrace. He didn't love her, didn't care, She raked her fingers through her hair, He would beat her and he'd lie, And for that she thought she'd die. |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Welcome to Passions!! A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
rule #1: never ever diss your own work. you can think you could do better, but don't say it sucks. that does a number with your self-esteem. good poem though, i like. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
lol I like this piece. I'm not laughing at you, I'm laughing at the last response. Yeah, in my opinion, if you say you suck, your work just gets worse and worse. So put yourself on a pedastal! Good write, welcome to the site! ~Alicia |
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