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Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

0 posted 2003-08-17 01:02 PM



If I feel the love inside myself
That others cant actually see
Moving with the hands of time
Waiting to be set free

I feel the passion in my soul
My heart is full of desire
Yet I hide within the shadows
Unable to show my fire

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

© Copyright 2003 Mags - All Rights Reserved
eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
1 posted 2003-08-17 02:16 PM


this is a nice write, but i dont think it belongs here...to me this seems a poem of enlightment, it actually seem kind of happy to me, but indeeda nice write

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas
2 posted 2003-08-17 07:18 PM


Actually it wasnt written with any happeness involved.  You see... I have this wall that surrounds me inwhich stops people from getting too close to me.  Sometimes it helps, but most of the time it hurts.  I am trying to figure out a way to knock it down.

As for posting here... I post ALL my poems in this forum.  Some may not like it.. but I consider the *Dark* my home.

BTW.. thank you

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
3 posted 2003-08-22 11:29 AM


Awww this made me want to cry. Seems a catch 22. Not good if you don't, and the feeling it's not good if you do. Let's hope you find a way to beat that, but I think the "right" person will see through it all, and will free you like a bird on wings of freedom. Sending

Bless ya bunches,
SharaRose @-->--

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (08-22-2003 11:30 AM).]

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2003-08-22 03:16 PM


i am not saying i don't like it becasue i do i really enjoy your writing, i do the same dark is my home, i didn't mean to have it come off as you shouldent post it here by no means at all, but you know what i meant, anyways stll agreat write...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

click1
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since 2003-03-25
Posts 152
usa
5 posted 2003-08-22 07:31 PM


it hurts to be held back...and the anger at yourself for doing so..I know well..

   dkw?  long time..good to read ya again...

Click

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-08-23 11:14 AM


Mags, mann I do that too ... and you know . .  one day, I tell myself, one day I will fly, as will you - as you do here . . . with your words
xxoo

cusick
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since 2003-07-27
Posts 668

7 posted 2003-08-24 10:08 AM


Beautiful sad poem well written. Maggie
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