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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-08-04 09:07 PM

I'm just sitting here staring into my own eyes.
A reflection of a deep and ever gripping sadness.
I've reached a new level.

A new high.
Atop this monstrous peak.
Staring down at my other weaknesses,
begging them to join me,
there's a constant plea in my eyes.

A new low,
I lie, down beneath this mud,
looking above at the soles of their shoes,
begging them in my silence.
don't block out this bit of light.

I run my fingers along my face feeling every imperfection.
Finding comfort in my brokeness.

I expected warm rain drops but they hit hard and cold,
And I feel exposed as the wind blows past my skin.

I hear the melody of you run past my ears,
tickling my memory.
I giggle to myself.
Kind thoughts of you invade my mind.

I take one last look outside
at the cloudy lights shining reluctantly down on the asphalt.

I've got this smile.
I've got these tears.
And they don't go together.
Maybe that the beauty of it.
Thoughts and feelings that contidict themselves.

Cancelled out.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-06-2003 05:30 PM).]

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

1 posted 2003-08-04 10:11 PM

Hmm...I'm not quite sure what to say about this. I like the way it flows, sort of tranquil and meledolic.

Thanks for sharing,
Lex

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

2 posted 2003-08-05 02:23 PM

this is amazing poetry!

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2003-08-05 10:46 PM

A nice write.

"I've got this smile.
I've got these tears.
And they don't go together.
Maybe that the beauty of it.
Thoughts and feelings that contidict themselves.

Cancelled out."

This could have been the ending.

~wranx

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-08-05 11:12 PM

I liked your suggestion about that being the end...thanks.

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-08-06 01:25 AM

This made me think of those times we are introspective, and we are, in a sense, having a conversation with our inner voice. Kind of a soul-searching exercise. Am I making any sense? I don't know. hehehe Now I'm confused. :?

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

6 posted 2003-08-06 02:11 PM

This is good. I liked it. I would have called it "Nothing" It seems to all add together and just cancel everything out.

Nice write.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

7 posted 2003-08-07 05:20 PM

you're good...damn good..

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