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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL 
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these pills still swim they still burn sometimes but not for the reasons before the emptiness feels like a crime i don't go over-board like i did but it still hurts like hell when i end up in the bathroom knowing again i've failed failed at what i set foot to do control my emotions, what emotions? i don't feel anymore just little simple notions numbness is pain, you know... so how do i know what's really there? this fog has fallen within me my answers don't seem to be anywhere |
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Purple Poet On Wheels Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 145Pittsburgh/Edinboro, PA |
Pretty good. You don't need the Toggled captalazation of the title |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
That was a good poem. I enjoyed it. a trickle of music from a well |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
"i don't go over-board like i did but it still hurts like hell " perfection, loved this, it is going in my personal library "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
This is really nice. I like how you talk about ending up in the bathroom, it made it all seem very real. nice piece.  |
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