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Dark Poetry #3

Intense to Ease

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-07-30 02:15 AM

Energy swells my blood vessels
Calm down or just stop altogether
Young youth and energetic

High voltage power is hard to grasp
Its comes one strap at a time
Through outlet plug and a switch

Too fast. Much too fast.
Adrenaline push that cant be stopped

High excitement
Twitch and stench

Silence

Intensity at ease

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im not trying to copy wranx im just experimenting a little.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2003-07-30 02:29 AM

HA!

I see no copying here m'friend.

But the free verse...didn't that feel good?!

nicely done

Have a peek at John Bone, Itchy
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A man, no longer young or energetic.

~wranx

[This message has been edited by wranx (07-30-2003 02:42 AM).]

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2003-07-30 03:31 AM

You are absolutely right. It did feel easier to write without the rhyme scheme and it seemed easier to say exactly what I wanted to. Thanx.

And John Bones, isnt this whole thing kind of a self-induced prison! You are a very wise and admirable man. Thanx again for the help.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell

eor
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since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-07-30 10:43 PM

wonderful!

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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