Dark Poetry #3 |
Agony is endless |
Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Angel breaks her feathers shedding them away. She prays them each a prayer as they burn to fuel her rage. She's come of age and ripped apart the last page. She can't remember, anymore what the words should say. So she lies in stagnant waste afraid to bleed or breathe. She pulls apart her veins and promises to set them free. But her agony is endless. Her loss has gone unseen. She fades into a grey mist, and dissolves into eternity. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
I really like the poem, I thought it flowed very wonderfully and imagery is awesome. Good stuff. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Great stuff. awesome images. I smell talent.. I especially liked the 2nd stanza For such a strong poem..the end felt the slighest bit weak. But that might just be me. ~Lex.. [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-28-2003 09:28 PM).] |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
*But her agony is endless. Her loss has gone unseen. She fades into a grey mist, and dissolves into eternity* You are a wonderful writer! The images are GREAT! A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. [This message has been edited by Dark Kisses (07-29-2003 12:28 AM).] |
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