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Revolving life of loves gone by
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Revolving life of loves gone by |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Somethings are funny like smoked coffee in shag carpet. all the while steam is coming up and we breath in the life that is just sitting here And i'm in the corner minding my own buisness when you have to catch my eye knowing that i'll never be the same that when you touch my hand i'm gonna crumble right there And people are shedding all over i'm chipping too, but i don't know if it is the hardness falling off... or if i'm just revealing myself. So, next time you look my way and you feel my very essence there on your hand moving it's way up your arm and through you Before you can see in my eyes what it is to hand you my heart Listen around you... as the people laugh at my spilled tears on the shag carpet . ~Carman |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
So sad that yearning that fear to let the emotions show... wonderful descriptions though!! Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Isis... thank you for your reply... This was a poem i wrote at the beginnings of having feelings for someone. All the fears of getting hurt again came rushing back... Carman |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Nicely written here. I too know the feeling of being *scared* to love again. I have chased many away just because of that. The scars that others leave on our lives is sometimes so unbearable. Yet we seem to move on, someway, somehow. Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Wow!! This was a very good and interesting read. I really enjoyed this, though I wasn't sure whether to cheer for you.. or tell you to run  .Sheila |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very impressive, hope it gets better for you. Great writing. Sandra |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Thank you Dark, Firecrakker, and Catalina... i appreciate you all for taking the time to read and reply  thank you Carman |
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jennyanydots Junior Member
since 1999-07-09
Posts 15 |
"And people are shedding all over i'm chipping too, but i don't know if it is the hardness falling off..." I really loved this part Nice work Jen |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Good Lord Jennyanydots.. as much as i appreciate the replys... did you get stuck on your enter button? Carman |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
My desire soon overcomes my fears...James |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I really enjoyed this, it was wonderful the way things fit that you would never have thought. Great work!! -Gin |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
my fears beat me to the chase... thanks for your reply James thank you Gin Carman |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WOW!!! strong emotions penned though I too am a hopeless romantic Put it this way Don't be unfair to yourself by allowing fear to overcome you The right guy might come and go cause you're scared well, before I start sounding like a chinese monk, i'll zip my mouth now beautiful read and be strong I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
thank you aicre... I tend to think of myself as a hopless romantic meets perpetual cynic. I'm always torn Carman |
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Missy Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 28USA |
Sometimes you just have to take the risk in order to find happiness! Missy |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Simply great! Was envisioning that gross green shag carpet they peddled in the 60's. Or was it red/orange??? oops...giving away my age here. Love the read! Good imagery. *S*   mYsTiC |
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