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Dark Poetry #3

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mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

0 posted 2003-07-09 02:38 PM

I wrote this in 1977 and haven't wrote again until recently. Tell me what you think? Thanks, mysticpoe

To my heart - and let it go
sustaining some evidence for no-one
to lie
and then to be done
I feel
but cannot accept
the time when my heart bled
Do I care
but I'll dare
God help him
for he knows me.

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

1 posted 2003-07-09 03:39 PM

it is pretty good, but honestly i think your other posts are way better, not to that this one is not good either...but i enjoy your other poems better

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

2 posted 2003-07-09 04:10 PM

Thanks eor, I appreciate your time and your comments helped with things a lot. Thanks again.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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