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The Colourless World
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The Colourless World |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Hey you I saw you standing tall Is there anything left for me? You were the one that I adored But then I saw you fall Nothing ever works Nothing ever clicks Nothing ever turns the right way (chorus) There is a space beneath the floor Of grey There is a world that I’d like to find Some day Over there I knew you were so fair Was there anything I could do? I never knew you true enough Then I saw the colour Nothing ever works Nothing ever clicks Nothing ever turns the right way (chorus) We speak our empty words Into the void We’ve tripped again Please don’t stand there You might fall into awakened state No more will we clutter on the walls We’ll let you crumble We’ll let you crumble (chorus) Hey you I saw you standing tall Is there anything left for me? You were the one that I adored But then I saw you fall This is the colourless world This is the place that you adore This is the colourless world This is the place where you don’t belong I’m never going back I’m never going back I’m never going to leave this state I’m never going back there I’m never going to say goodbye This is my life This is my life (chorus) Nothing ever works Nothing ever clicks Nothing ever turns the right way This is This is the colourless world |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
"You were the one that I adored But then I saw you fall" Very cool.  I enjoyed this.Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you very much. I appreciate the feedback. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
nice write, i agree with ladybug i loved that line and this ine as well "There is a space beneath the floor Of grey There is a world that I’d like to find Some day" that says it all...wonderful "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Hey thanks eor for the feedback. I also really like the chorus I developed for these lyrics. I really ado appreciate the feedback though, thanks  |
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