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Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

0 posted 2003-06-27 04:14 PM

My Blood Red Angel
6/27/03

Blood red Angel
Over a sea of blue
Shedding her crimson tears

Her wings are tattered
Her clothes are torn
Her dear heart broken in two

No where to stay
Yet no where to go
Alone she flies above

Blood red Angel
Over a forest of green
Shedding her crimson tears

Her skin is broken
Her hopes are tattered
Her poor soul torn in two

No where to go
And no where to stay
Alone she hovers above

My blood red Angel
Over my home so gray
Shedding her crimson tears

Her dreams are torn
Her wishes are broken
Her tender self tattered in two

My home she stays
My place she never goes
Alone she flies above

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

[This message has been edited by Dragon Mistress (06-27-2003 07:49 PM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-06-28 12:48 PM

Tanya, even though this is sad, I
love this poem.

Hugs

Ethel

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-06-28 02:57 PM

Tanya - where have you been?

I love angels, first time I ever came across one as bittersweet as yours
xxoo

a_hollowman
Junior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 30
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

3 posted 2003-06-28 03:12 PM

A... nice poem. THe one part that caught my eye was how you wrote

No where to stay
Yet no where to go
Alone she flies above

This is rather peculiar, in that "no where to go" is either misspelled, or written to form a different meaning altogether, which, by accident or by plot, leads to a more intriguing poem. If you didn't mean to do this, perhaps consider it more in the future, as this is a blessing, and if my natural occurence you wrote no where, that this is a truly unique piece.
Lastly, I conclude by saying most poignantly that this is a style more should write in, to not make this so onerous a task for any.

-a_hollowman

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-06-28 04:38 PM

nice write, intruging(sp?), different, but good...

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-06-28 07:11 PM

I really love this poem!
Perfect length and flow.
Beautiful.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

6 posted 2003-06-29 06:03 AM

I really did like this poem. I am an atheist, yet angels I find interesting to write and read about. A very powerful fantasy creature to me. Great stuff.

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