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Dark Poetry #3

Exquist Poisoning

rapturedmist
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

0 posted 2003-06-27 04:56 AM

Hating the beauty and the words inside
...cringing at every breath I take-
I'm temperally free from that need
that endures me; holding me

Shadows from the past lurk around-
Behind the scars are hidden truths that
lay deep with in
dissipating every vision of reality

Give me a chance to escape...
to break free through some barrier of pain
you know...hell isn't always below ground.

~RM
Ehh don't like this much..it seems to be missing a stanza but I can't think what to put. -shrugs- oh well it shall do.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2003-06-27 03:45 PM

Many have found that hell
isn't only below the ground...
Nice writing...James

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

2 posted 2003-06-27 04:21 PM

You think it seems to be missing something? Why ever would you think something like that? It seems complete to me. *hugs* Good work.
Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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