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Dark Poetry #3

Living in days

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

0 posted 2003-06-26 06:05 PM

A day as today
as yesterday
as a new day
as tomorrow
as forever
as neverending
as abruptly lost
as my worthless thoughts
as depressing
as my supposed life
as lost
as my mind in
a whirlwind of
boredom or is
this activity
seemingly endless
so abruptly ended
with a word or thought
of treachery
of inending doubt
masculinity is lost
in feminity
childishness
frsaken by
adulthood aged
innumerable years
less than a day old
yesterday was today
until it was
combined with
tomorrow and
thus thrown to
the whirlwind
of despair that
fills my heart
with confused meddling
thoughts that
make no sense

Sometimes you can't change what's going to happen but you can change how you percieve it.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

1 posted 2003-06-27 12:53 PM

mmmmm...i likt this alot, the short abrupt lines do alot for this style of poem, ehyme scheme was great, nicely written...

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

2 posted 2003-06-27 04:23 PM

Wow, I enjoy this a lot. I must agree with the previous noter, the abrupt lines do a lot.
Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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