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Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

0 posted 2003-06-18 12:49 PM

(Written on 3/28/96...during the depressing college years)
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Everyday my heart is breaking
everyday the pain I'm taking
is crushing all I have to give
with this sadness, I cannot live

Each night I drown in tears
each night I live my fears
I can't go on feeling this way
I cannot face another day

of living in a tired dream
of waiting to wake from the scream
Asleep inside a fantasy
fighting for what will never be

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-06-18 02:36 PM

Shannon, this is a very well-written poem. I hope that things are less depressing nowadays. Thanks for sharing these feelings you had with us.

Hugs

Ethel

a_hollowman
Junior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 30
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

2 posted 2003-06-18 04:21 PM

nice poem... seems the monotony of college seeps into your work... well composed, and you seem to have expressed yourself very well... congrats!!
- a_hollowman

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

3 posted 2003-06-18 04:23 PM

I really enjoyed this. It was awesome. I know you feel. I just came from that place...and depressed no longer Peace. ~*~Kirah~*~

"Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown.

kadafi09
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 143
California, United States

4 posted 2003-06-18 05:46 PM

to me life is but a dream. an idea that to me is found in your poem. but your dream is a nightmare. hopefully it is so no longer. lovely poem.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

5 posted 2003-06-18 07:08 PM

mmmm, i like. nice strong rhyme scheme, made the poem flow very nicely...

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

6 posted 2003-06-18 10:24 PM

You conveyed for feelings with a real nice write here Ladybug. Enjoyed.

mysticpoe

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

7 posted 2003-06-19 09:23 PM

Thanks, everyone!

I definitely was depressed in my college days, but I'm happy to say that life is going well now

Unfortunately, since that bad stuff is gone, I no longer have all that great darkness

to inspire my poetry, but hey...I'll do my best.
Thanks for the kind words, and hope to see you all around!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

8 posted 2003-06-19 09:26 PM

Hi again, for anyone interested...I actually had written a poem a few days ago about how I miss the "depressing" years of my life, since they were such a means of poetic inspiration. If you are interested, the poem is called "Cloud Nine Congestion" -- I appreciate any feedback, thanks!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

Forgotenandgone
Member

since 2003-05-07

Posts 52
NC

9 posted 2003-06-21 03:35 PM

I like it and i can relate..

_______________________________________
Please dont cry when i die
For i will be whatching in heaven
and i dont want it to rain on my funeral...

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

10 posted 2003-06-22 12:54 PM

Thanks, Forgoten! I really like your quote about not wanting rain on your funeral.

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

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