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Eddie New Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 8 |
Never ness Pain shooting through the body, Blood flowing from the wounds, Existence slipping down the drain, The agony focused on by the brain, Falling down to never ness, A place where I’m afraid to rest, For if I rest for too long, My soul will surely be gone, Coughing blood from deep inside, Losing my grip on reality, The pain’s as strong as my will, But it’s a matter of time until…. Falling down to never ness, A place where I’m afraid to rest, For if I rest for too long, My soul will surely be gone, Hearing voices in the distance, Disgusted by the sight of me, Now sleep is coming too, There is nothing else I can do, I fall down to never ness, A place where I shall now rest, And if I rest for enough time, What will be Satan’s was once….. ..MINE! |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
what are you saying,did you sell your soul,pain is life |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Wonderful 1st post and welcome to Dark Passions. I hope to see more.... A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
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Eddie New Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 8 |
It is a representation of everlasting pain and torment |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
yo eddie its lee i always did like that poem even if it did nearly scare that women half to death i showed it to lol my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing [This message has been edited by RedStoneEB (06-11-2003 03:54 AM).] |
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JenniX Junior Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 29 |
Beautiful poem. Excellent first post. Keep up the posting. Luv to read more. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Ooh, nifty... I really like your descriptions, and your use of repetition is really cool with that couple of lines you brought back up. Overall I think you've done a nice job on this poem... Welcome to Dark #3, and welcome to Passions in Poetry. I hope you enjoy your time here. If you've any questions about the forum, feel free to email me or any other moderators, that's what we're here for.  Check your email for a special greeting.Parasite Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. |
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