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RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

0 posted 2003-05-02 06:01 PM

I do not know
where I am.
On a thin rope,
I dangle,
somewhere
between here
and there.

I am caught
out on
a dangerous
ledge
staring down
into stark
emptiness.

I balance
on this sharp edge
with bent whobbly legs,
while clinging
to broken vines
with swollen chafed hands.

My mind is
twisted up
in all kinds
if intense thoughts.

No matter
how hard I try,
I cannot loosen
my own hands
which tie me.

I have forgetten,
laughter can heal
and love of myself
will make me stronger.

I cannot remember
the peace of
where I once was
I can only wallow in
the stark darkness
of where I am.

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

1 posted 2003-05-02 06:03 PM

WoW, I luv this!!

Write more soon!!

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2003-05-02 06:51 PM

Hi Elmo!

Thanks for the kind comment on my poem. I'll be writing again soon! Bye!

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

just a junkie
Member

since 2003-03-04

Posts 53

3 posted 2003-05-02 07:07 PM

I loved this part!!!!!!

Very visual and creative.

I balance
on this sharp edge
with bent whobbly legs,
while clinging
to broken vines
with swollen chafed hands.

Just a Junkie

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2003-05-02 09:17 PM

Hi just a junkie,

I am glad you liked that section of my poem. I like it too! Peace and keep faith! And thanks so much for writing!

Bye!

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2003-05-02 10:19 PM

I balance
on this sharp edge
with bent whobbly legs,
while clinging
to broken vines
with swollen chafed hands.

I love that stanza, great piece overall..excellent.

Tomer

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

6 posted 2003-05-03 05:22 AM

Hi, Tomer,

Thank you so much for writing. I am so happy you found that stanza to be good and liked my poem overall. Keep faith!

Bye,

RavenEye

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

tornskirt
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

7 posted 2003-05-13 04:14 PM

amazing. i can totally relate.

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

8 posted 2003-05-15 06:14 AM

Hi tornskirt,

Thanks for writing. It is comforting to know others can relate to similiar feelings I have. Sometimes,it is so hard to get through life and to know I am not alone eases the burdens, somewhat. I appreciate you commenting on my poem.

Bye,

RavenEye

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

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