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Jager
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since 2003-04-27
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Event Horizon

0 posted 2003-04-28 07:43 PM


My arms are getting heavy treading water
As the shore pushes me further and further away
Getting closer to the deep end of the ocean
Against the current, praying for rain

Praying for a way to make it through another day
Or for the sea to swallow me, and end the pain
A storm is building on the horizon
And I'm praying for it to come my way



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tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30
Posts 87

1 posted 2003-04-28 08:31 PM


very powerful

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

peaceful_dreamer
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since 2003-04-25
Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW
2 posted 2003-04-28 11:29 PM


this is powerful. i felt every word.
nicely done

sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
3 posted 2003-04-29 06:28 AM


I so understand how you feel...

And I agree with the others: the ocean imagery is very powerful.  Keep writing!

Sylvia

Jager
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since 2003-04-27
Posts 12
Event Horizon
4 posted 2003-04-30 12:03 PM


Thank you all for the kind words.
Lost_Soul
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since 2003-04-17
Posts 37
California, United States
5 posted 2003-05-11 09:28 PM


Very Powerful. I know how you feel.

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