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qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

0 posted 2003-04-20 02:00 PM


ROLLER COASTER

Up and Down my heart goes,
loving with all I've got.
How happy I am when you notice me,
how sad when I think you've forgot.
This ride it goes on forever,
and at times I just want out.
Loop 'da Loop, around again.
What is this all about?
Together forever,
then just friends.
You say you still love me,
but then the ride ends.
No more phone calls,
not even a quick letter.
Is that too hard?
If I forgot you, would that be better?
Yes, the ride was worth it,
but the fun ended too fast.
I want to ride again.
I want to make it last.
Savor every loop and turn,
appreciate the ride a little more.
Let go of the screams freely,
not cover my eyes like before!

~Up, downs, loops & turns, the ride of life itself. It may end a little too soon, but the bumps & zooms are what it's all about!~


ELMO

Happy Easter Everyone!

[This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (04-20-2003 02:01 PM).]

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MellonCollie
Member
since 2003-04-11
Posts 117
Austria,Europe
1 posted 2003-04-20 02:37 PM


Hey i've already read this one on your The Black & White Of Me-homepage...and love it like most of your poems
How happy I am when you notice me,
how sad when I think you've forgot

--i love that line


how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

[This message has been edited by MellonCollie (04-20-2003 02:38 PM).]

Peacebri
Junior Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 44

2 posted 2003-04-20 10:02 PM


Great poem, you explain the roller coaster of love perfectly. great job!!
qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
3 posted 2003-04-20 10:15 PM


THANX!! Yea, I'm running out of new material to post--lol


ELMO

Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2003-04-21 02:42 AM


Happy Easter To You Too.....
This is a wonderful piece!!!!
I love roller-coasters....and they are very much like relationships and life as you've shown right here.  
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


IcyFlamez89
Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292
Jersey City NJ
5 posted 2003-04-21 12:57 PM


This was a great piece! To tell the truth I've been a lil afraid of roller coasters since one time it stopped when we were at the peak of one hill (scary cuzz i was stupid enuff to look down). I mean I still go but there's always that fear of it abruptly stopping when you least expect it. To the roller coaster of love and life I have a similar feeling. It catches you off guard and when your starting to enjoy the thrill if ends, leaving you in a most vulnerable spot....anyway, I'm babbling, so bak on topic this one realtes to so many. Can't wait to read more of your poems.
PoetOfDarkness2002
Junior Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 41
Lost in my dissociative unrealistic world
6 posted 2003-04-21 01:03 PM


hey, I love this poem...it explains so much, and its what i'm feeling about my current boyfriend....he only calls once in a while ..and theres times when everything fine and then the ride stops....thank you for sharing ur lovely work..Happy easter to u too..

Manda

qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
7 posted 2003-04-21 11:16 PM


Thanx every1!!! You ppl are too kind!! Yea this roller coaster analogy explains most of my relationships & my life in general, but the good times outweigh the bad by far so that helps, not dwelling on the bad stuff & lookin forward to the good!!! Hope every1 had a great easter & lots of chocolate!!


ELMO

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