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MellonCollie
Member

since 2003-04-11

Posts 117
Austria,Europe

0 posted 2003-04-12 07:48 PM

i wrote this one a couple of weeks ago when i was in a real bad mood, because of my x-girlfriend...

can you

can you feel my pain
can you hear my silent cries
can you imagine my sorrow
       every second a part of me dies

can you heal my darkened mind
can you silence my screams
can you save me from myself
       please stop to appear in my dreams

can’t you help me not to die
can’t you take away my fears
can’t we go back to better times
       can’t you stop my tears

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

[This message has been edited by MellonCollie (04-12-2003 07:49 PM).]

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

1 posted 2003-04-12 10:28 PM

I can identify with these images, questions, and feelings because of my own situation. Also I like the appearance of your wording.

MellonCollie
Member

since 2003-04-11

Posts 117
Austria,Europe

2 posted 2003-04-13 05:52 AM

Thanx

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

[This message has been edited by MellonCollie (04-13-2003 06:12 AM).]

tornskirt
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

3 posted 2003-04-19 08:28 PM

i can totally relate, excellent!

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

MellonCollie
Member

since 2003-04-11

Posts 117
Austria,Europe

4 posted 2003-04-19 08:34 PM

hey thanx tornskirt

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

tornskirt
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

5 posted 2003-04-20 10:03 AM

your very welcome melloncollie! thanks for letting people like me (a) enjoy your poetry and (b) share a personal part of your life...

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

6 posted 2003-04-20 01:45 PM

Awe, poor MellonCollie, I too know how this feels!!

The feelings will soon pass & someone/something greater will come into your life, I've found this to be true in my own life--I think this is one of my favorites by you!!

ELMO

StephyBob07
Junior Member

since 2003-04-18

Posts 37
Texas

7 posted 2003-04-20 04:37 PM

another great poem! ~stephy

Dreaming is the best thing you can do.

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