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qtpieelmo
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0 posted 2003-04-04 04:33 PM



Rose Petals & Thorns

Your love is like a rose,
it's open then it's closed.
Double-sided, intertwining,
slowly dieing & then reviving.
When I think it's dead,
it shows some life again.
Roots are sprouting,
no more pouting.
Satin petals caress my skin.
Must be gentle,
delicate petal,
falling apart in my hand.
I've lost it once again!
A thorn is stuck,
blood is drawn,
I have no luck,
no green thumb.
Sprinkle some droplets,
to show that I care,
it looks pretty lifeless,
but the seed is still there.
I'll come back tomorrow,
my little flower,
& bring you back,
with all my power!


ELMO

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majnu
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1 posted 2003-04-04 09:49 PM


my favorite of yours that i have read. it nice the way you use the color for different parts of the poem. but more than that, the tone and diction were just great.

-majnu
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qtpieelmo
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2 posted 2003-04-05 08:57 AM


Thanx!! Its suppose to kinda look like a rose--lol Thanx for taking the time to read my stuff!!

ELMO

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Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2003-04-05 05:21 PM




(smiles) Yay! Oh Katie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I just love the shape, I wish the color could be in the book too as truly the love all resides in the root of the rose, where if it is in the soil of the heart it is destined to bloom again! (big hugggssssss) I love this, sweet friend, you have my botanic vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Katie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

qtpieelmo
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4 posted 2003-04-05 08:35 PM


awe--Thanx so much Mistletoe--You are definitly the sweetest!!

ELMO

SPIRIT
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5 posted 2003-04-06 11:02 PM


I liked this a lot and neat presentation doesn't hurt - my vote is happily cast.
Brad Majors
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6 posted 2003-04-07 12:26 PM


nice
qtpieelmo
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7 posted 2003-04-11 03:42 PM


Awe, Thanx Spirit & Brad!!--That really means a lot to me!!

ELMO

carol
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8 posted 2003-04-13 11:28 PM


Great write

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

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Justbleu
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9 posted 2003-04-22 03:21 AM


What a sweet darling compassionate piece....
I really enjoyed the presentation too!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


MellonCollie
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10 posted 2003-04-22 01:33 PM


love tickles & stings...isn't it
great poem again, get's my vote
slowly dieing & then reviving
i love that line...makes me hope things may change someday...

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

QjQ
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11 posted 2003-04-22 04:32 PM


very nicely said, this write has to be a rose between two thorns!!!
qtpieelmo
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12 posted 2003-04-22 06:22 PM


Awe, thanx you guyz!!! You are too sweet!! It feels more like a bush of thorns to me--lol


ELMO

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