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On the Edge of Love
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On the Edge of Love |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
I toe the line Hesitant to cross With eyes closed I lean towards loss I don't have the strength to run Falling before I decide to jump On the edge of love Looking down At what I fear Through eyes blind with tears From staring at the sun Falling before I decide to jump On the edge of love Without wings I plummet Headlong into the storm Cradled within the fury of feelings newly born I feel I've finally won Falling before I decide to jump On the edge of love lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
"falling before i decide to jump" i love that line enjoyed the rest of the poem al well |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
I enjoyed this one* Temptress*Moon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wandering, This is a well written and emotional poem. I enjoyed it Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
I can relate to this one alrite ... Nice work.  |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
this has a great musical ring to it. I guess it is the style you chose to write, reads off as good lyrics. Enjoyed the read! With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
I liked the images you created... your piece meant a lot to me... thank you for sharing Take care.~ Tara ~ may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
You describe those feeling very accurately. Good lines. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I really like this! I like the way you repeat those lines...they're great ones. |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Simply wonderful! *thanx*   mYsTiC [This message has been edited by mystic requiem (edited 02-26-2001).] |
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