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JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

0 posted 2003-03-28 02:19 PM

The wonder of mankind
a legacy of hatred and death
the power and the glory
of the story written across the
landscape of memory.
A story of stuggle, defeat.
Refusal to die and continuing fight.
Where is the glory?
Where is the power?
The power of sanity grasping for purchase
the glory of success, viewed in survival
not in terms of winning.
The voice inside my head is crying
eons of pain and sickness
a lifetime of scraping to exist
the voice inside my head is a wimp.
It is the animal in my soul
that deserves recognition.
The pure instinct to live
the unadulterated drive to BE.
That is the nature of me.
I am no hero, I am not human.
I am the essence of primordial sludge
I exist merely through breeding
the thoughtless drive to survive,
THAT is the truth of my existence.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

1 posted 2003-03-28 09:53 PM

Enjoyed, well done!

SilentFreija
Junior Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 37

2 posted 2003-03-30 05:22 PM

That was a great poem! I liked how you used questions, I think adding questions makes the poem stronger.

Where you look for broken hearts...you'll find me...
mend my broken heart and love me
because I forget how to smile.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2003-04-26 01:24 AM

I know it must be annoying, but I really have never known what to say in order to do justice to one of your poems. Cop-out for a real indepth comment? *sigh* No..writing of any kind (even replies) has to be wrenched from me these days.

Either way..I'm here and reading..and I'm a very picky reader.

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

4 posted 2003-04-26 01:58 AM

That has to be one of the best compliments I've received Tempting one, thank you.

Feel free to pick me anytime picky reader.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

StephyBob07
Junior Member

since 2003-04-18

Posts 37
Texas

5 posted 2003-04-27 04:24 PM

wow, really great poem! ~stephy

"...and poets are born knowing the language of angels." -Madeline L'Engle

IcyFlamez89
Member

since 2003-02-14

Posts 292
Jersey City NJ

6 posted 2003-04-28 03:10 PM

Aack!! I can't believe I missed this! So powerful...so emotional...so..true...This is a keeper.

~startin 2b ur fan 2, hehehe~

I am the result of a typical dysfuctional family

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