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Dark Poetry #3

No Place for Dreams

Dream
Junior Member

since 2003-03-16

Posts 10

0 posted 2003-03-16 07:42 AM

No Place For Dreams

In this city of light
We have forgotten
How to shine
In this city of gold
We bargain and sell
Our dreams away

There’s no place for dreams
In this world

In this city of night
Decaying and rotten
are our minds
In this city of mould
‘fore heaven and hell
the darkness slays

Let’s create a midnight world
Of broken dreams

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2003-03-16 09:11 AM

Welcome to Passions

This is a very nice, though dark, debut piece. I enjoyed the read and look forward to reading more from you.

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

2 posted 2003-03-16 08:24 PM

Good first write, dark and good

WisprWnd
Junior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 34

3 posted 2003-03-17 01:22 PM

I like it. I have one about the city, but I would'nt use it unless requested.
The city is dark. The light is all fake and the air above is always out of reach. I agree with this dream.

WisprWnd.

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

4 posted 2003-03-18 07:45 PM

Hey great first post--Welcome to DP

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

5 posted 2003-03-19 11:51 AM

Good yet depressing!!!!! Write on Dream....

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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