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To drown in winter
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To drown in winter |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Snow hits the glass. The sun hits the street. Seen above the frost, between the wedges of the wheel. I'm driving near the cape, past pine scenery. My knuckles mark degrees. I'm heading for the sea. I'll park my car at the line of snow and curl away. The tide's a winter wall of wine and where I want to lay. Pressing closer to the coast, sand is freezing skin. Wheeling birds call through the white. I watch the waves -- they're tumbling in. I want to know the distance where both oceans meet -- the sea in muted smell of salt; the sky uncertain, wide and deep. I know it's over. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow, this was a beautiful. It was very descriptive, very vivid.just beautiful..  Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Mmmm, "I'm eating you now, hope you don't mind?" Sorry, squirrel dude. couldn't help myself. |
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gpc Junior Member
since 2003-03-01
Posts 43 |
Ah this is lovely. A real sense of escapism is what I can see here. i especially loved the line "My knuckles mark degrees", brilliant. Perhaps the idea of the title could have been explored more, drowning seems to suggest an overwhelming of a power which is what i didn't get out of this poem. GPC |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you are amazing, and you have that way to make every reader feel what you place before them.....really nice mike! Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Its nice to see some good work in here.  You know I love ya poetry, right? You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mikey: loved this the first time I read it I can see you standing . . . staring ahead . . . xxoo brilliant |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
jeez you're good.  K |
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