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Ada'doLisdo'ti
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since 2002-12-10
Posts 123
California

0 posted 2003-01-17 06:39 PM


Come into my world of dreams,
Where nothing is as it seems.
come and see what madness inspires,
Wait till you see the dark desires.

Over the river through the wood,
This can't lead anywhere good.
If you feel friegtened just relax,
When my nightmare is over you can go back.

Come ride my nightmare,
Come ride my nightmare.

You'll rise to hieghts you wouldn't dream.
Only to fall so fast you cannot scream.
To the depths of depravity,
You think your strong...we'll see.

Just when you think the ride is through,
Thats when I'll turn to you.
I'll examine your inner bieng,
To find out how to make you scream.

Then to your nightmare we will ride,
Together side by side.

Come Ride your nightmare with me,
Come Ride your nightmare with me.

Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence  the most.

© Copyright 2003 Albert D Lopez - All Rights Reserved
hohenstein
New Member
since 2003-01-17
Posts 9

1 posted 2003-01-17 08:52 PM


i like this alot. its like some frightening nightmare riddle that little children would chant about come ride with me, come ride with me. it chills me to the bone
SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745
California Desert
2 posted 2003-01-20 07:52 PM


Very interesting read, I liked it. One small negative here the 'i before e' rule doesn't apply on the word 'heights. Also look to your word 'frightened'.

Happiness comes from kindness.
Happiness cannot come from hatred or anger.
Dalai Lama

[This message has been edited by SPIRIT (01-20-2003 07:54 PM).]

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