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Dark Poetry #3

Forget That I Saw

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

0 posted 2003-01-14 03:25 PM

Torment.
Dormant.
Excuse me my mind was lost for just a moment.
Stripped.
Ripped.
Forgive the lack of content.
Dream.
Scream.
Pardon the momentary abandonment.
Weep.
Sleep.
Forget that I saw your sadistic intent.

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."(C)alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch and make you bleed its not worth it"(C)alibaster

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2003-01-14 05:40 PM

alibaster,
very powerful poem, made all the more so by the use of one word lines.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

2 posted 2003-01-16 08:18 PM

That's fascinating. I used the single-word-line technique in something that's getting published in school, so I've been pondering it a bit lately. It's really great to see it in someone else's writing. I like the way you used it. This new context gives me something further to consider.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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